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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2004-06-27 07:54 PM

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A question in wait,
time notwithstanding, a backward query,
a comma in possession,
O of birthing thoughts,
eyes too big to behold

I am a poem in wait.

Where would you put me, then,
as bloodlines are tined true,
my mind is already furrowed with deeper thoughts
than you have imagined.

I am too old for you,
and yet I runnel even upwards, towards earth,
as times unraveled via
excavation…

I am already lost, once…I was here before you,
written and spoken of,
but Alzheimers struck
and lost me…

I unraveled, and yet, birthed again…

My feelings are here,
but my past words futured not;
I am undone.

I am...alien? Or am I

a poem,
undelivered?

You alone hold me. I am your egg.
Fertilize me, and I may grow.

But be careful.
Stagnation is permanent.

June 27, 2004

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

1 posted 2004-06-27 08:09 PM

"My feelings are here,
but my past words futured not;
I am undone.

I am...alien? Or am I

a poem,
undelivered?"

and then your ending! Very impressive to my mind. Truly enjoyed. (The artwork? do you paint with media other than words?)

Sunshine

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2 posted 2004-06-27 08:13 PM

No, my friend. My only "art" might be in words, and my camera. Period.

I cannot paint, for I've no talent.

I thank you for your eyes, and your soul.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2004-06-27 08:47 PM

"A question in wait,
time notwithstanding, a backward query,
a comma in possession,
O of birthing thoughts,
eyes too big to behold

I am a poem in wait."

Truly amazing m'friend....amazing!!
Hugs~

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

miscellanea
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Posts 4060
OH

4 posted 2004-06-27 09:08 PM

Sunshine,

I bet you try too hard for I see an artist in you. If you were to only use colors and not try for a realistic scene, I bet you'd be pleasantly surprised. If these are photos you've taken, they are full of artistic elements...

miscellanea

Martie

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California

5 posted 2004-06-27 09:26 PM

Karilea

You do have the eye of an artist...you birth art in words so often it is stunning, and your photos are further proof...Amazing you are, sis!

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
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6 posted 2004-06-28 12:50 PM

I shall just say.....astonishing!

....jo

passing shadows
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displaced

7 posted 2004-06-28 02:48 AM

incredible!

I am enjoying your work lately...very much

Tiersdin
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east coast

8 posted 2004-06-28 07:04 AM

I can only say, "excellent", dear lady!

~tier

Janet Marie
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9 posted 2004-06-28 08:25 AM

I am a poem in wait.
======================

you aint neva lied

(awesome pic)

kayjay
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since 2002-06-24

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Oregon

10 posted 2004-06-28 09:46 AM

The sad part of not being the first to respond is that you've so many fans that they get the good lines. Your gifts continue to enchant. KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

11 posted 2004-06-28 09:50 AM

Karilea

Your wisdom is unmatched along with artistic talents which make you a master at anything you do. Deep thinking and definately in touch...wonderful poem...although, made me sad.

bslicker