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Forever Today... |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
The time has come, The final hour has arrived, The moment of truth, The very second you bid goodbye. An eternity did pass, Before the tears began, Unto death did the heart impart, The memories that never seem to end. A life thus ruined, Embrace now the demise of faith, For in the dark dwellings of pain, Despair is forever engraved." |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I kind of know what you are trying to say here. I would have taken this good idea and wrote it then let it sit for a week and then rewrote it. Just me. Robert |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Your poem is full of emotion. There are times when writing from the heart is all that is necessary. Good, honest poetry is often times spontaneous. We can always dot the i's and cross the t's later (not that you need to - response to previous comment) Thanks for sharing. SG |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Verve, I thought this was a very strong write -- especiallly the last verse. |
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