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0 posted 2004-06-26 04:09 AM

Burden of Decision
(a Rondelet)
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no right to cry
walkin' so long my feet are sore
no right to cry
I refused to let myself fly
Chose to walk the journey once more
In search of whats left to live for
no right to cry
© Copyright 2004 Dawn van Krieken-Smith - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-06-26 04:44 AM

just when you think there's nothing, you walk right into something
Susan
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2 posted 2004-06-26 10:01 AM

I understand this all too well.

Hugs -- Susan

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3 posted 2004-06-26 10:05 AM

Decisions! Decisions! But Dear Muted One, you do have the right to cry! ~ and fly!

I enjoy reading different poetic forms. Thanks for the Rondolet!

Mornin' huggums,
EA
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4 posted 2004-06-26 01:35 PM

How well I understand this Dawn...
Hugs~

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back
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5 posted 2004-06-26 02:06 PM

Oh, Muted, this carries with it the weight.  Beautifully written, but feels so sad.  My heart goes out to you.   ......jo
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6 posted 2004-06-26 02:09 PM

I like this very much....what are the rules to doing a rondelet? and yes, this reads very sad....
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7 posted 2004-06-27 01:31 AM

thanks you guys

SEA: if you go to this link it will show you how to do a rondelet http://members.optushome.com.au/kazoom/poetry/rondelet.html
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cool beans thank you!
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9 posted 2004-06-27 04:49 PM

no right to cry

You beautiful have every right to cry and every right to fly.

Hugs you.

Maree

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10 posted 2004-06-27 05:03 PM

Beautiful as ever...the tears only highlight the intention of a smile.
Well done.
TD
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