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Weir Of Death.
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Weir Of Death. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665
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White fast running water, foamy, swirling and eddying into rocks and floating jetsem. Seagulls and crows wait for snatched morsels. Lurring white noise sound, tantalising youths on scorching days of summer. First hands go in, to feel the white stream.Flowing liquid excitement. Toes touch water, barefoot and bold to go.After a while the weir lulls you, dares you to go further, tentatively you move on. It's easy now, you have your feet as you step confidently across it's rocks.Suddenly your feet are gone, you slide down the fast moving chute. Whiteness, darkness, blue sky, dark shroud.The swirling whirlpool of wrath, twists and bubbles around you, deafening rush past ears. Pulling you deeper, ever deeper, freezing cold water numbs you, disables you, washes the fight from you. Succumbing to the power of the river. Under water your dead body floats, silently, slowly, coming to rest under the riverbank. The willow above you will weep. The river has another sacrifice, until the next time it calls to the unwary youth. It says ''come touch my waters with your fingers''. ''Death where is thy sting? Love where is thy glory?'' William Shakespeare. |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
That's a pretty unruly river. Is it the same one Deliverance was filmed on? LOL. Your imagery was cinematic. I always enjoy reading your posts. You have the unique ability to facilitate certain feelings and mindsets through the compilation of carefully selected words. It really is an art that you perform well. Your poetic friend, Kevin |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...this left me breathless |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Stephen King.....move over! Right out of a horror movie, captivating and intriging.....enchanting the reader like a spell, almost like the river itself! Pulling me in its weave of words.... But the real horror, the river DOES exist and the deaths are real.... Brilliant story writing with a poetic twist! Love, Your one and Only VQ~ "The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched.They must be felt with the heart."~Helen Keller (1880-1968) |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Phil, this is such a dark write for you. But, it's captivating and so well written. Take care......jo |
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