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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2004-06-23 12:33 PM

Photographs of broken dreams
faded and worn
framed in a square of sun,
reflecting.

A slide show
blips in the darkness
processing,
hot and cold tears.

Torn between failure
while holding onto the future,
pressed between
the lonely beat of my heart.

Passing through shadows
drawn,
to the negatives
in living color.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

1 posted 2004-06-23 12:37 PM

I like this. I like the analogies. Enjoyed.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

2 posted 2004-06-23 12:41 PM

i liked it bloozy and the last lines are very memorable... cool.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2004-06-23 01:01 AM

Passing through shadows
drawn,
to the negatives
in living color.

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while this is a bittersweet write...tis also a very cool play on theme and intend of inspire...you worked those analogies and extended metaphors Lori-girl.

Good to see you posting again.

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

4 posted 2004-06-23 02:09 AM

Oh, Lori...and I thought --

....but I also think this poem is classic Bluesy, and as pretty a way to tell a painful truth as there ever was....

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iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2004-06-23 02:11 AM

"Passing through shadows
drawn,
to the negatives
in living color."

Amazing lines, Bluesy! Always good to read you.

......jo

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-06-23 02:57 AM

Bluesy baby, no one does it like you

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2004-06-23 08:36 AM

pics and memories..funny how they
just get pushed into a box
and then brought out from time to time
to take us back there

you did this good bluezy..
but I thought you would

enjoyed it

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2004-06-23 08:40 AM

Excellent write Bluesy!
Bittersweet yet....very much your style.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

9 posted 2004-06-23 08:41 AM

Wow, a very emotionally charged write...sad, but wonderfully written and expressed.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

10 posted 2004-06-23 08:50 AM

Blues, you do so well...

awesome imagery!

~tier

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

11 posted 2004-06-23 10:05 AM

Thank you fellow poets, you're much too kind,
and I thank you for being so good to me.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

12 posted 2004-06-23 10:23 AM

Oh Lori, dear I can relate to this. I could never have written these feelings this well, but am so glad you did. This needs to be in my library.

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

13 posted 2004-06-23 07:01 PM

Lori,
You know I love your fighting spirit. And this is another excellent write. Peace...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

14 posted 2004-06-23 07:31 PM

Hey pretty lady,

Your spirit is just as lovely as ever, even when you write of negatives, you do so with eyes that see around the edges. Thanks for being here.

Always,
Reg

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

15 posted 2004-06-24 07:08 AM

Hi Lori,

Beautiful writing, as always. Missed you!!
Hugs,

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

16 posted 2004-06-24 03:38 PM

Torn between failure
while holding onto the future,
pressed between
the lonely beat of my heart.

Aw, hon... I know this place... and you've picked the perfect metaphor... for such a life is as one-dimensional as a slide or photo... You deserve so much better... but lordy, you write it well! *S*

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

17 posted 2004-06-24 06:27 PM

I can't even begin to pick a favorite line...loved every one....but that's the way your poetry is for me

SimplyGold
Senior Member

since 2002-07-10

Posts 1453

18 posted 2004-06-24 06:56 PM

Wow, "draw to the negatives in living color.."

Very nice write.

SG

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

19 posted 2004-06-25 07:47 AM

beautiful...

regards
sudhir

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

20 posted 2004-06-25 03:20 PM

Blues Serenade,

   Slides just never seem to be enough.  Where is the animation in the pictures?  This is so sad.  But, still lifes are what artist paint, as you have done wo well.
   Have a good weekend, Blues Serenade.

              miscellanea

kayjay
Member Elite

since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

21 posted 2004-06-25 05:45 PM

These things that are so tough on us
Often come out as beautiful stories.
Yours did.
Well done. KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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