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Mockingbird She
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Mockingbird She |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Her full lips beckoned Soft sounds that ended in N or M Prolonged against the inside of her throat As she breathed life into words Far too gentle to tell the horrors Of their meaning while I watched wet white teeth Break the syllables Parsing them into bits small enough My ears did not reject them nor did my mind Find itself unable to absorb And I noticed how her tongue Licked the letters off the page rolled them round as a cherry stem Tied in knot without leaving some hidden place A learned dexterity she used to amuse All the while knowing Beyond the façade lay other shadowed greys Still then When words had stopped their seductive tones And she had turned from all that was her voice I remained Wondering in a forgotten tongue Of graveled knees And long intrinsic refrains |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh my...no one fashions word images like you my friend.......this is incredible...just incredible!!! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Cpat, Mockingbird She. One never can tell. She may have been earnest for the first time in her life. Enjoyed this. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
hugs my friends... for the nice words..and because.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Still then When words had stopped their seductive tones And she had turned from all that was her voice I remained Wondering in a forgotten tongue Of graveled knees And long intrinsic refrains" ...yes..oh yes. Thank you Captain. Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
beautiful!  I'm just in today reading some of my favorites around here. Will you PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE publish a book of your poetry?  All of my impurities are right here on my sleeve. This is Me"---Faith Hill |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
As she breathed life into words ============================ just like you do when pen is in hand. and I? hang on every word. *L*  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Where's my fan...whew! Talk about seductive words! lol No, really, phenomenal poem!  ....jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
whew! wow! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Did you get the license plate number? (lame joke, I know) You write so beautifully, and yet I confess, the thing that confounds me about your gift, the thing that keeps me wondering as I sigh your sadness with you, is this: "Did he tell her this?" Admittedly not my business, I know, but me being ME, I had to wonder... hugs. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"And I noticed how her tongue Licked the letters off the page rolled them round as a cherry stem Tied in knot without leaving some hidden place A learned dexterity she used to amuse All the while knowing Beyond the façade lay other shadowed greys Still then When words had stopped their seductive tones And she had turned from all that was her voice" Geez Ron...when I read this I wanted to go find her and watch her speak... Missed you!"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
powerfully written and expressed, exceptional writing as always. Thank you for sharing. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You have a remarkable gift, Cpat~ Impressive writing, as always. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Always you leave me wanting more, and awaiting in eager anticipation for the next piece from your poetry pen. Well done sir. |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
wow |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I hang on your words, each a lesson learned ! you are a gift to all filling each line with emotion and beauty...   SIGH ~~**~~ |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
When someone speaks your language...they really get printed across the page. Even if they are imaginary, or those you've perused, you are mused dear C. and anyone would be so inclined to worship. It's a gift to find you here. Warm greeting hugs. Love, Reg |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
maybe i took something from this others didnt, but sounds like someone who says the most beautiful things, or the most happy of things...all thew while masking their own hurt, horrors, sadness. and yes, eventually the facade falls, and those who hid the sadness often lose their voices. youve written this so beautifully..so many of us can relate to this |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The subtlety did not go undetected... |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Juju= puddle -I wish a guy could say that about me.................. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
After that - Do you suppose one could request a duet with Martie anytime soon? I can't imagine the images that would "rise" from that steam? Beautiful but then I see your name, and know it will be. |
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