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When is the Time
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When is the Time |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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When is the Time? There’s a cool breeze blowing in the afternoon and it’s taking me past the sky to a place sweetened by clover picked from an old lullaby. Hush, the baby’s all grown up now; gone, the eggs with youth and perfume, they’ve nested quiet then burst to wing and now it’s spring again too soon. The holding of hands in cold of winter is now a dawn still waiting warm, and sweaterless the lavender sky is drawn. When is the time when the ache is gone? There is a loss of something every day. More than time with edges I am carved by slip of rocks and broken tentacles making me more inward now, than skin starved. When is the time when the ache is gone? I dredge the river that flows in me looking for something within this circle to upend, turn over, then finally set free. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah dear Martie...is the ache ever gone? I don't think so..and, I think it's there to show us we feel and are alive. Beautiful ache to this write sweet lady. Hugs~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I am going to have to echo what Enchantress said, because I know she's right and I know you know she's right. But how you express it Martie, oh so tenderly.  Mxx Have you any dreams you'd like to sell? |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Parting is indeed such sweet sorrow..... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
ahhh Martie, you always manage to say it just right... jwesley |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
 i feel this one down to my soul |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh lady...this aches...I know |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
When is the time when the ache is gone? I dredge the river that flows in me looking for something within this circle to upend, turn over, then finally set free. Time makes you bolder, even children get older, and I'm getting older too. Thank you always, for your enduring gifts of poetry, Martie girl~ |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, everything that I read of yours really touches me deep within. I love what you do with words, sweet lady.  Hugs, Ethel |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie you make music from twig notes and the strings don't show only the sounds coool as youuuusual |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Martie, my dear, Sis told me she read this last night...but could not get in to reply. She's right... it's another martiesque moment... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie It cannot be said better than this, excellent. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
A beautiful portrayal of the seasons in life! Great read. JL |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"and sweaterless the lavender sky is drawn. When is the time when the ache is gone?" ---oooh, loved this. And the whole last verse especially...well, the whole thing really! Your poetry is always a beautiful read and this is no acception. ~*Krista Lee Knutson*~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
When is the time when the ache is gone? I dredge the river that flows in me looking for something within this circle to upend, turn over, then finally set free''' ~~ tender in your grace, very moving very touching.... ~~**~~ |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
the "ache" only numbs in time....but becomes tolerable....nice write sweetie |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"The holding of hands in cold of winter is now a dawn still waiting warm, and sweaterless the lavender sky is drawn. When is the time when the ache is gone?" Oh Martie.... this is so achingly beautiful  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and sweaterless the lavender sky is drawn. ======================== More than time with edges I am carved ======================== I dredge the river that flows in me ======================== your personifications rock!!! I store them in my vestibule.  LOL |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
The time is now, if we let it be. Let it be. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
You've just left and I thank you for the note... fly safe, both ways... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
There is a loss of something every day. that line says it all, Martie. It seems, with age, the pain comes more frequently. Those we've lost a long time ago made to seem more recent by the frequency of losing new friends and family. Peace to you, friend, Corinne |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Martie, a sensational write! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
how well you say this and with feeling that digs down deep into my soul and touches me so powerfully - seems there is loss and gain and you say how deeply the losses touch us - just loved it so much Martie - Paul |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Martie, This is superb penmenship! Brava Bella Roniece Dawson-Bruce |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Always amazed how "rhyme" doesn't handcuff you. Very nice! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Though each loss is tempered with a gain of sorts... Spring is indeed here - and so are you, dear lady...  |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Martie ... the ache never seems to leave no matter how many seasons pass. Maybe it's God's way of reminding us of a loved one until we are united in his Glory. Sending you peace dear lady. Marti If you truly love Nature, you will find |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ 'When is the time when the ache is gone? I dredge the river that flows in me looking for something within this circle to upend, turn over, then finally set free.' I was too much reminded of an aching-remember that I would do better to forget~ Love you .... bunches~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
For some hurts there is no ending, for some losses there is no regaining....and for some bindings there is no release. For some poems and some poets, there is no response but to feel their beauty and live those spoken-unspoken moments through them. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Martie, Most of the times I manage to escape what's secretly inside, but you always manage to help me become aware of myself and my feelings through your words. You are a dear poetess and mystery friend. I really appreciate your skill and your wonderful heart. ~Sadie~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Martie, I am incredibly moved by your descriptively emotive writing... Linda |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
The omnipresent absence... you lent existence to that nothing here in your coloring of the wind... well spoke m'lady.. (bow) |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Each of us is everything we have ever been. Being human it is helpful to narrow focus to human scale, but the best we can do with the past is to accept it. This poem is excellent and played in choruses through my soul. Thank you for sharing it. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
It was such a treat to finally meet the person behind the words! Have a safe flight home and I hope we can get together again some day, Martie. You are a special person. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Dear one, when you find it, please let me know... For I know well of this ache you speak of. Hugs... |
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Sybil Member
since 2002-09-12
Posts 73Midwest |
My sisters know when good things should come back to blossom once again. |
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