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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal 
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Long, lean lines Shadowed in the darkness Silvered dew shines Quivering beneath breath Motions sublime Fever intensifies A touch – A whisper – A kiss – Shattering the Universe S.A.T. The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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MexicoCityBlues Junior Member
since 2004-01-04
Posts 48The Point of Know Return |
I like this a lot :-) "The story of life is quicker than the wink of an eye. The story of love is Hello and Goodbye. Until we meet again..." -Jimi Hendrix |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Extremely well done Susan...much enjoyed. Hugs~ Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Susan, this is very good writing and I enjoyed reading.  hugs, Ethel |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Superb! TD |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Simply superb, Susan! Sensuos & scintillating ~ and with a touch of class! Very well done!  Bravissima poetessa! Linda |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Dear Poet Friends, thank you so much for your kind replies. I do appreciate you all. Hugs --  SusanThe whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
very nice Susan sensual, beautiful |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Susan~ I really like your sultry, slow-burn style. This of course is probably centered around lovers, but on the other hand could also be open to a few other interpretations - which is the mark of an excellent poem. It's short, but perfectly concise for effect. I look forward to reading more of your work Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Muted & Honeybee -- thanks for your kind replies. Hugs -- Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very softly done yet powerful too |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Susan this tastes good. I would love to see you try your wings in the mature content section of the website. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
thank you passing shadows & wayoutwalt. Much appreciated comments. As far as mature content, hmmmm, I might find myself blushing a little too rose. SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
Subtle sensuality. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Susan, I think I felt a tingle in the reading of this write. I like that. Nicely done.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
lovely, Susan Sadelite |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Time prophet, Larry and Sadelite -- thanks so much for your comments. Hugs -- Susan  Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, yes! Great expression of emotion, Susan! Outstanding! Have I told you how much I like your writing? Well, you are one of my favorite writers! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Iliana, thank you for that. You warm my heart. And the encouragement is a great boost. I do so enjoy your work as well. Thank you my dear friend. Hugs -- Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
beautiful write...your verse flows so freely as does your heart...this was wonderful. take care, amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Aimster -- Thank you for your kind words, they are appreciated. Hugs -- Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
yummy!!! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A superb way to be shattered Susan, and an excellent write. Well done! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Susan, "Yummy" -- I like it. Gentle Spirit, Thank you for you for your kind compliment. Hugs -- Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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