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Forever I seem, to paint this picture green...
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Forever I seem, to paint this picture green... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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The last night we sat below evergreen and you were as high as they full of their everlasting green my stare grew arms of branches thick and swayed betweens the hours of safe denial and creeping desperation... I wasn't what you daydreamed into the night about anymore And you looking away from me in that old special way sent the ashes of burnt skies and their mountainous grey just above evergreen covering the stars as if to say 'There's nothing to see here, anymore.' |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
A sad write, gemma, but a potent one. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
My dear little gemdrop, if you can write like this in your twenties, I can only imagine what you will be writing in the coming years! You are dripping with talent! ~ and if this poem is a reflection of your reality at the present time, then I am sending you an extra big, comforting hug! Loveya! LL |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Sad and beautiful. This is truly inspirational writing, thank you for sharing  Andrew |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
You write beautifully and are so incredibly talented it must flow from every pore. I enjoy reading your work. Kevin |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Once again you stir the heart and soul with your beautiful words. Eric |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I love the way you did this, with the italics. Powerful write. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I wasn't what you daydreamed into the night about anymore" The ache of crystal vision...excellent poem! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I really liked "between the hours of safety and creeping desperation." Corinne |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd! I LOVE your sad ones! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
gemjop, I couldn't read this just once or twice. It is lovely, especially the first part with such wonderful imagery describing the picture green. Sad, though. Why is timing of a romance sometimes off? miscellanea |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
my stare grew arms of branches thick and swayed betweens the hours of safe denial and creeping desperation... I absolutely love this vision. Wonderful Gem  Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
The last night we sat below evergreen and you were as high as they oh the insult of such royalty, true love sees only visions of purity. Tremendous write. Happy write. Very much enjoyed. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
And you looking away from me in that old special way sent the ashes of burnt skies and their mountainous grey just above evergreen covering the stars as if to say 'There's nothing to see here, anymore.' then he is a fool dear... for there is much to see even in those things we have seen so many times before.. those things we think we know as if they were the back of our hand still hold wonders of change.. wonders of shadow and of light.. wonders of depth and circumstance... |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
an enjoyed write ARCTIC WIND |
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