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Sting of the Cobra
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Sting of the Cobra |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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between your finger and thumb reached my heart before my brain, leaving me numb like flowing venom through my veins? Is love cold, calculated, or unexpected, unplanned? Is it always pain? Is it a hissing cobra, a viper, coiled to spring, and snare the very soul of me? If I face the cobra, its bite could bring the end. That is why I run away afraid to face the light of day. But my breath, though weak, sighs one thing -- that I might die without your sting. Could this venom merely kill the pain? Or is it true, a serum pure could be a cure to everything? |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, my iliana! A brilliant piece of writing ~ but stings to the core! I'm sending you a bottle of "serum pure" faster than you can say, "Angels Are Among Us". It is sure to cure everything that ails you, Sweetums! Loving hugs, Linda |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I was hoping you were reading my mind, Linda! Thanks for your very sweet response!  Did anyone ever tell you, you're an angel???!!!! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you are the serum pure, your own antedote, i've discovered wonderful words this morning that you've woven |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
iliana I'll have my Randy dragon fly earth angels serum to you. Great write.  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, I wonder from where the cobra came. You know this is perfectly written... I hope it has not been inspired. Sending o and x your way. Sadelite |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Inkedgoddess -- deep down, I know that -- a moment of memory hit me last night and I just let it muse me; pretty potent cobra bite, though! Thanks for reading and your sweetness. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Seymour -- lol, *smile*, and a big thank you! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sadie -- See my response to Inkedgoddess. It was that and a little bit of other things I suspect are in the wind, you know. Thanks, sis. .....jo |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Wow!!! Strong stuff, is there any antidote for feeling what is toxic may be nourishing? You so beautifully capture this dark and paradoxical side of passion......Big ~P |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thanks, Paul. Your comment said it all -- love is a paradox -- at least, that is what I've seen. ....jo |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ouch! This bites! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
ouch! Well written! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
What a neat poem. Excellent write!! JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
good wright I liked the poem. It seems like we are always in the same situations. your poem made me happy. Juju |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good question one I have asked myself |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
in answer to your question, I can only say in all truth, when "in love", there is joy in just being there with him/her never uttering a word, they call it perhaps the heat of passion, but I call it, a love like God intended for us. It is all encompassing and good. Terrific write...thank you |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Beautifully scripted, powerful. It's a very potent piece of writing that I thoroughly enjoyed. Kevin |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Dixie -- yes, a good question -- but I have found the truth of it -- the poem just came from some feelings I remember. Thanks so much for your response. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kevin -- yes, thank you, for me the sting of the cobra was very powerful; changing my life. .....jo |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
LeeJ -- Thanks for your very kind answer. (Check your email, please.) ....jo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Wow! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Interesting read, quite thought provoking. Love is like that, yes? At least between two lovers. Perhaps we should all become snake charmers, allowing love to dance for us without needing to taste the poison? SusanThe whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Susan, lol -- you're great -- that really gave me a treat, and yes, that's a good idea! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Icebox -- *smile* Thank you, so much! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, this is fantastic. Very powerful, and beautifully written. I know just the feeling, too. Sandra |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sandra, Susan has an idea that we should become snake charmers -- lol -- I like that thought! Thanks for posting; your words are so kind. ....jo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Indeed its true..ask those that know...but don't ask me...James |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
A friend told me once that love was like having fifty clamps set on your heart and then having them pulled tightly in every direction, with some chunks being torn off and others left there, forever tugging the heart. He was right... and yet, love (almost) always seems to be worth it. With meds the doctors have given me, before taking them you have to weigh out whether the relief makes the side effect worth it. Sometimes it does, sometimes it doesn't... I hope with whatever this painful bite was, that eventually the side effect fades and haunts you a little less. Very expressive and real poem, I love it... Always, Alyssa (sorry for the lengthy response... I really do have much too much to say!) Poems are made by fools like me, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thanks for your post, GG. I've been wondering about you -- hoping you are okay.  |
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