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A bittersweet Love
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A bittersweet Love |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal 
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I sit upon the grass green field Sheltered by the arms of an aging Elm Shaded from mid-day rays of beaming sun Where the warm breeze wafts of sweet peas And my lashes fall in flutter to come to rest Sleep slips in on me unaware As breast rises in gentle rhythm And the ship of dreams hoists it sails To carry me across waters forbidden Into the mists of wishes unfulfilled Only in dreams may I capture your image And step to your side as if I belong Taking your hand in my longing fingers And tracing your strength with gentle touch Catching breath in a stilled heart moment You turn to look and catch me blushing Your gaze cradling me in tender caress And when you smile, oh such a smile As if lit with the glory of Heaven within And I am warmed to the very core of me A meadow lark lets loose with song And I am stirred from this moment of bliss Just a breath away from tracing your lips From consummating desire with loves first kiss My soul sighs heavy with the bittersweet loss I rise and walk slowly away Dreams of such pleasure left to another day And return to the world where there is no you and I Only darkened rooms void of the light of your smile And a half lived life that begs for completion S.A.T. The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
breathtaking and superb... Such beautiful rhythms Susan. TD |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
TD -- thank you most kindly  Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
forlorn and beautiful all at once |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
This is an incredible poem. It is so heartfelt and passionate. You have drained the levy of eloquence. It is all here dancing with perfection. It flows so well and the imagery is so crisp that I didn't just read it, I watched it. This is a keeper so well written I would have expected it to be Catalogued in the Library of Congress under its own name. It is simply an attestation to your deft and innate talent, and your character. Thank you for writing so beautifully and sharing it with us. Warm regards, Kevin |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Susan, An outstanding conveyance of that feeling; perfectly written. You write what I have only imagined to write. Thank you for posting it!) Sadelite |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
What kindness and love in your replies-- my heart melts, thank you Inkedgoddes, Kevo and Sadelite--  SusanThe whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, yes, Susan -- I see you've met the Cobra, too. I still like your idea about becoming a snake charmer! Really lovely writing here.  ....jo |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thanks Jo, big smile here Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...I know this feeling...well...James |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
HI Susan, You certainly said a lot here. It's sad to have only dreams..and then they go and get interrupted. Sheesh. Beautifully written. Sandra |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a lovely sad write...missed it earlier, but glad I found it |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
And I am glad Dixie found it, a beautiful but certainly bittersweet write. How dreams can sometimes bring to us that which we crave...though haunting they can be as our awakening slips them away... |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I'm so glad you all enjoyed the write. And I thank you for your kind replies. Warm regards to each -- Hugs -- Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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