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I Put Your Music Away
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I Put Your Music Away |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
It’s not like I didn’t wait all these long months and nights. Why was I waiting? passionate plea: If I only knew! I thought that through me you might solve the riddle in your heart it’s not for me to understand why I’m not on your mind love’s lullaby did not soothe me while I tried sleep walking with the faithful and the numb some things are just clearer in the haze so long as I’m awake Core Us: I’m not here to settle a score put down your metal stake heart shaped metaphor I don’t hear your music anymore I’m nurturing my insanity longings risk a change of heart I just want to feel free again and Swayyyyyyyy On over here Bridge: Flowing cauldrons hide the rain of dreams that have passed by the way Great regret? No not for me I’m fine enough not that you asked but then again I hope you’ll look me up sometime I’m not that hard to find I wouldn’t say we’re lost forever never say never, but... I won’t be waiting not today I just put your music away Savannah hums her own tune |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
very emotive...nice metaphors...good write... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oh, Savannah must be swaying now yep, put those old notes away and hum a new tune |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kahlil -- now that was a very interesting write -- have you put this to a tune or is this simply a play on words? It makes a good one, you know.  ....jo |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
...just humoring myself... Thanks everyone! ~K~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
K~ I've read this three times ... it just continues to grow on me~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I enjoyed this - am sending it on to my musician brother... and I especially liked the Core us play of words...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kahlil Enjoyed the read. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is an excellent piece of writing... I too would love to hear this put to music. Very much enjoyed. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Very, very nice. I would like to hear this put to music.  SusanThe whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Thank you! I just thought it was kinda goofy when it started coming out of my head and I wrote it as a not-song. It's hard to say, though, what may come of a heart song....~K~ |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
What a beautiful flow of deeply expressed...and deeply felt words. Eric |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I'm honored, sir. Thank you. ~K~ |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Yes, beautifully written indeed. I stand in agreement with the other "Posters". It's very lyrical with a great message of rising above and beyond. Life after the lights go out, so to speak. It is simply a beautiful poem. Kevin |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kahlil Beautiful and positive feelings brought to this reader. Thank you. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Thank you, fellow writers, for honoring my whim. ~K~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Great regret? No not for me I’m fine enough"... ~ Keep that thought, my friend!  I've been thinking of you! You really are special! Loving hugs, Linda |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Linda: SMOOTCH!!! ~K~ |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I love this. It reflects some of my life right now, and its just simply enjoyable writing in my opinion. All of my impurities are right here on my sleeve. This is Me"---Faith Hill |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Temptress: I'm finally able to let go of futile hopes and wishes, and accept the things I cannot change. But at the same time, I honor my capacity to love by tucking it into a place of safe keeping, for it is real. I'm glad you enjoyed the write. ~K~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Kahlil, your writing is very reminscent of a long lost friend of mine. I love the open honesty in this. It is indeed a strength. ~Tier |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
...Just humoring myself, she says.... Please -- humor yourself often, and keep sharing. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
the title says so much, James! Good that you rekindled it at the end.Gives this an extra "PUNCH!" Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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