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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia 
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We floated happily for a while upon parallel blue ocean waves, taking in the feel of love with poetry. Crested moments swept us out to sea then back again to reality, while landlocked mentality kept all but poetic passion at bay. Somewhere upon silent silver-laced shores, our mutual mental meanderings slowly washed away love in a mourning tide. So much useless debris, flotsam and jetsom hearts tossed about like yesterday’s seaweed, left to rot on the beach of dreams. I sit and stare in solitude from my vantage point on a quiet jetty that seeks to reach across the seas, and wonder what happened, what went wrong. And as the sun sinks silently into the brooding sea, I listen to the pitiful screams of seagulls passing by me, and wonder if the sounds I hear are my own pitiful cries carried off by the crashing surf? |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"I listen to the pitiful screams of seagulls passing by me, and wonder if the sounds I hear are my own pitiful cries carried off by the crashing surf?" nice concept...weaving imagery and reverie...good write |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"I listen to the pitiful screams of seagulls passing by me, and wonder if the sounds I hear are my own pitiful cries carried off by the crashing surf? " There is something about that sound, isn't there -- it's haunting to a hurting heart. Good read here.  .....jo |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Somewhere upon silent silver-laced shores, our mutual mental meanderings slowly washed away love in a mourning tide. ================================= you know of course...you had me from the title on..  and? woooohooo !!!! alliterations and ocean imagery!!!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So very beautifully written Kacy! Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Kacy, Yup, definitely bird themes going here! Interesting the emotions the ocean dredges up, isn't it? Nice write. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"We floated happily for a while upon parallel blue ocean waves, taking in the feel of love with poetry. Crested moments swept us out to sea then back again to reality, while landlocked mentality kept all but poetic passion at bay." Now there's a verse I can relate to a bit too well...  |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Great writing. I loved it. I loved the imagery. I really enjoy your writing. Kevin |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thanking each of you for your time and replies. I've sat on that jetty more than once in my life, and expect to see it again before those screeching gulls carry me off for good. LOL. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, this is how I feel at the ocean, too. Wonderful writing. Sandra |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well, I was going to try and say something meaningful....But JM got me to giggling, and well...shucks! Keep well you! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
thanks wranx and Sandra LOL, JM makes me giggle sometimes too |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
seems like your writing has stayed expectional since my poetic hiatus while landlocked mentality kept all but poetic passion at bay. ~I dig these lines |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
kaile! so happy to have a visit from you again, I've missed you! Thanks for the generous reply, and for pointing out your favorite lines. I kinda liked those lines too |
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