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A Stone Skipped
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A Stone Skipped |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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A stone, hurled across placid waters, skipping, splashing until the final fall into the watery darkness. Falling lazily toward moss laden watery earth. Such is the journey of one’s soul upon the escape of a final breath, as the mind skips and stops, falling silently into rest. A place where, mere moments before, neurons fired rapidly, painting pictures of dreams, bringing to the lips a murmur, one perhaps of a final word of love, or the gleam of eyes fading into dull orbs where trust once escaped and bathed one standing, holding a warm and gentle hand, perhaps a final squeeze, a twitch to say ever simply “goodbye.” Bring to me the smooth cool stone, that I might again hurl and watch, counting the splashes one by one.....remembering of a boy long ago....once again feeling that urge to look, find yet another stone. If perhaps I found another stone, might the breath not escape the cooling lips? Might the hand not relax and slip slowly from fingers that ache to hold in that which is slipping silently away. As silence screams and darkness hovers lazily above....as a tear falls quietly into the placid waters and a single wave’s ring touches again and again those of the stone’s skip....and I whisper goodbye. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Mangus, This so touching. Yes, it would be nice to be able to skip those stones, bouncing reflections of past with ripples. I could sit at this setting for days, skipping stones with you. (There's a lot I'd like to remember about my Dad and others, too.) This was excellently perceived and expressed. I enjoyed spending time there. Excellent imagery. ~Sadelite |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ 'as a tear falls quietly into the placid waters and a single wave’s ring touches again and again those of the stone’s skip....and I whisper goodbye.' You touch me so with your thoughts~ Thank you~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
So touchingly very Barry! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, You can't write it much better then that. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you make me want to hug you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Barry, oh the memories.....what superb poetry this is -- like one of those moments when you made the stone skip as far as you could -- this one went a long, long way. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Barry this was amazingly bittersweet, such imagy you have projected, astounding thoughts to ponder...yes sir, this is a stand up and cheer BRAVO write. Thank you and bless you |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
so touching Barry....Heart hugs and good morning. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
A very profound write Barry. Richly descriptive!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"....as a tear falls quietly into the placid waters and a single wave’s ring touches again and again those of the stone’s skip....and I whisper goodbye." This one was deeply felt Barry.. Much enjoyed the depth of mood here. ~Soft smiles & gentle hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Saying goodbye forever, knowing it is forever, is never easy but in this you've said it perfectly, not just in a way helpful to you, but all who read this will find acceptance just a little bit easier. Very, very well written, my friend. jwesley |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
And some of those stones skip on forever....rings, and rings, and rings.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Bring to me the smooth cool stone, that I might again hurl and watch, counting the splashes one by one.....remembering ~*~ You know what I say to people, now, in any form of leave-taking? Later. Because a later will always come to those who believe... and I'm a great believer... |
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