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Open Poetry #32

Souls for Sale-No Credit

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

0 posted 2004-06-08 05:55 PM

Souls for Sale
No Credit

Don’t believe what you hear about nightlife.
Come a quarter of two
all the edges turn blue
and you’re adrift with the Johns and the Jims.

I’ll tell you the truth about nightlife:
laughter fades like old scars
when they empty the bars
and the red neon stutters and dims.

I’m a born-again child of the nightlife,
I glitter and shine
like a dream dipped in wine
and I sing sad old whiskey-soaked hymns.

Don’t get caught in that honey-trap, nightlife;
it’s a whisper, a sigh,
a guitar-lullaby,
and will crush you to make plastic gems.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

C?
Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 190

1 posted 2004-06-08 07:03 PM

Where the he## have you been?
This is a LEGEND of a poem.
I think it needs ONE more line though...
anyways, just my opinion,
Collen

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

2 posted 2004-06-08 07:11 PM

Excellent. This is really well written and expressed. Enjoyed.

Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

3 posted 2004-06-08 11:37 PM

Nan -- how I love this gem of a poem. In my early 30s I saw a lot of that lifestyle and reached the same conclusion.

...jo

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2004-06-09 01:37 AM

made me think

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

5 posted 2004-06-09 03:58 AM

WHAT and awesome last line...well..the whole poem sang to me...but that last bit really was genius.
"and will crush you to make plastic gems."

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2004-06-09 09:13 AM

Now where on earth did you dig up this gem???
I want the map!

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

7 posted 2004-06-09 03:22 PM

Thanks, guys. I had fun writing this one, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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