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Mercer's The Lost Times |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Two miles past Crawford’s store The road turns to dust and ruts, But if you follow on for three more miles And turn left at the first fork You’ll end up at the Buffalo Just above three rock falls. We stopped at Crawford’s that day Buying cold beer and sliced meat While old man Jans was telling you about The way his daughter used to come in summer Stay for a few weeks working at the store Then be off again to the city and college I wrote: “ Some places are caught on the edges of swirling change circling as they try to remain against the current somewhat the same and yet all the time, changing.” You laughed at me when you read the words Then sat back on the grass as we listened To the gurgling splash of late spring currents Against cracked stone shelves “You know that thought is not original.” You grinned “What is?” I asked. “Perhaps the moment, perhaps nothing.” You answered. Later we stripped our clothes and swam In the deep green water that pooled above In an attempt to escape the heat And I knew as I watched your form In the water That moments are nor original Nor are the feeling that go with them But they are real…. And that we like the places caught in edges Try too Try to hold and stay the same And all the while Change When darkness crept on the edges of the tree line I pulled my journal again and simply wrote “Today, I watched beauty in sound and heard liquid breath in your words. If I could hold such formless entities in my hands I would have held this day and you along the edges of time.” Later… you tried to fill the void in you with me And for a while The world simply held it breath Denying change. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When darkness crept on the edges of the tree line I pulled my journal again and simply wrote “Today, I watched beauty in sound and heard liquid breath in your words. If I could hold such formless entities in my hands I would have held this day and you along the edges of time.” ~*~ Merci, for Mercer... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat, Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
That moments are nor original Nor are the feeling that go with them But they are real…. And that we like the places caught in edges Try too Try to hold and stay the same And all the while Change When darkness crept on the edges of the tree line I pulled my journal again and simply wrote “Today, I watched beauty in sound and heard liquid breath in your words. If I could hold such formless entities in my hands I would have held this day and you along the edges of time.” Later… you tried to fill the void in you with me And for a while The world simply held it breath Denying change. ======================= and for the things that we can not hold, for the things time and change will take...there is poetry like this to capture the moment and imprint a memory to page and the readers heart... thats what your poetry always does. “Today, I watched beauty in sound and heard liquid breath in your words. If I could hold such formless entities in my hands I would have held this day and you along the edges of time.” *smiling at you* oh yes...you do hold these things... every time you pick up a pen.   |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
El Capitan, you are in a league of your own! You are a raconteur supreme! "You laughed at me when you read the words Then sat back on the grass as we listened To the gurgling splash of late spring currents Against cracked stone shelves" ~ Just one of the passages that I thoroughly enjoyed the experience of reading! And lastly, Dear Captain, don't you ever "change"! Warm, appreciative hugs, EA |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed this a lot  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
a wink and smile to ya, Cpat |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
*nothing i can say* i'll smile instead |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Beautiful, every single word, every single line, I felt like I was there, outstanding write. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"And I knew as I watched your form In the water That moments are nor original Nor are the feeling that go with them But they are real…. And that we like the places caught in edges Try too Try to hold and stay the same And all the while Change" ....and... "When darkness crept on the edges of the tree line I pulled my journal again and simply wrote “Today, I watched beauty in sound and heard liquid breath in your words. If I could hold such formless entities in my hands I would have held this day and you along the edges of time.”" When all the superlatives have been used ... may I just say, thank you Captain, and softly smile. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love the way you write about your moments in life what an ending to that day...*sigh* |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Later we stripped our clothes and swam In the deep green water that pooled above In an attempt to escape the heat And I knew as I watched your form In the water That moments are nor original Nor are the feeling that go with them But they are real…. And that we like the places caught in edges Try too Try to hold and stay the same And all the while Change When darkness crept on the edges of the tree line I pulled my journal again and simply wrote “Today, I watched beauty in sound and heard liquid breath in your words. If I could hold such formless entities in my hands I would have held this day and you along the edges of time.” Magnificent Ron, absolutely..smiling from ear to ear here. another keeper. Maree  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"When darkness crept on the edges of the tree line I pulled my journal again and simply wrote “Today, I watched beauty in sound and heard liquid breath in your words. If I could hold such formless entities in my hands I would have held this day and you along the edges of time.” Later… you tried to fill the void in you with me And for a while The world simply held it breath Denying change." The entire poem....soooooooooooooooo goooooood. I bow before thee, King-of-the-pull-my-heart-strings-every-which-way -- obviously..... this touched me.  jo |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Nothing I say can be more original, my friend... so I just bow in respect.... you keep teaching, and I will try to keep up with the learning regards, sudhir |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Later… you tried to fill the void in you with me" Love the line and the thought. Hiya bud...  |
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