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Sadelite
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0 posted 2004-06-08 09:17 AM



I wonder how she’s painted  
Hidden under colored cloth;
Are her eyes full of sparkle
    Or given death dull eyes?

Is the canvas finished
Or met by destroying brush
that rubbed away vibrant line,
leaving choking portrait
Dust?

After last sitting  
she hoped the artist knew
how to paint what's really inside,
hoping for try anew.

          Sadie

(I’ve said a lot of angry words lately to the people I love
the most, breaking longtime bridges.  I would only hope
that they can forgive and think not less of me.)
    


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Enchantress
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1 posted 2004-06-08 09:20 AM


If they really know you..
they will see the love inside.
You are such a giving person.
All will be well...
Heart hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Sunshine
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2 posted 2004-06-08 09:21 AM


Well, stop that!



Actually, Sadie, sometimes
some things have to be said,
in order to clear the air.

Them that love you, don't stop.

and you said it here....

           she hoped the artist knew
           how to paint what's really inside,

trust me, honey...
He does.

Martie
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3 posted 2004-06-08 09:29 AM


Sadie

"After last sitting  
she hoped the artist knew
how to paint what's really inside,
hoping for try anew."




Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2004-06-08 09:32 AM


Sadelite
Friends are made of sugar and spice and everything nice, don't worry.

Sadelite
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5 posted 2004-06-08 09:36 AM


Thank you Enchantress.  I've pretty well cut strings and I really didn't want to, but
circumstances lately left me in a mess and I did it out of frustration and self-hate.  

  I'm feeling a little better, thank you, Sweetie...  

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6 posted 2004-06-08 09:38 AM


Here's one who thinks more....and is glad for a bunch of reasons, to see this poem.

The painting's not done until the last brush stroke is dry, and that doesn't happen until long after the artist stops working. Until then, it can change and change again.

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Sadelite
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7 posted 2004-06-08 09:45 AM


Sunshine,

Well, stop that!

Actually, Sadie, sometimes
some things have to be said,
in order to clear the air.

(Sunshine, this is true, but I DIDN'T clear the air.  I emptied the air.  And said nothing that made sense.  I hurt my oldest sister who already has had enough to last a lifetime, cut ties with  
those I need)

Them that love you, don't stop.

and you said it here....

           she hoped the artist knew
           how to paint what's really inside,

          
trust me, honey...
He does.   (He was just used for poetic purposes; I thought it would sound silly to have several artists, so I chose that gender.)

You are a Sweetheart, Sunshine.  Truly a blessing...
              Love,
             Sa

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (06-08-2004 11:16 AM).]

Sadelite
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8 posted 2004-06-08 09:50 AM


Martie,
   You're a gem.  Thanks.
                Sa

Seymour,
   One of my Dad's favorite rhymes.  You couldn't have said anything that meant any more to me.  Thank you.
              Sa

Ratleader,
   A way with words you have.  Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
             Sa


Sudhir Iyer
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9 posted 2004-06-08 09:55 AM


I feel this poem a lot... very deeply...

regards
sudhir

Sadelite
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10 posted 2004-06-08 10:04 AM


Sudhir lyer,
  Thank you for your goodness.  
                  Sa

passing shadows
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11 posted 2004-06-08 12:54 PM


precious
LeeJ
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12 posted 2004-06-08 01:06 PM


bless you, what a wonderful write...we all say and do things we don't mean...and it hurts so, when we do....but an I'm sorry and a big hug might straighten things and make them perfectly new.

Hugs and best wishes.

iliana
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13 posted 2004-06-08 01:32 PM


Sadie, the ties between sisters are unbreakable, I believe.  You just need to work it out with her -- Mom always quoted, "You always hurt the ones you love," maybe that's a place to start; I think our other sister knows that deep down.  Sadie, this was a painful write, I know (good one), but I see some optimism in your words and that makes me feel better for you.   and love, the other one
VAS
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14 posted 2004-06-08 02:07 PM


The true Artist, the one Who has created you knows the you inside, He does need a capital H.

One of my favorite songs is "He's Still Workin' on Me." Have you heard it?

It's a wonderful poem, I especially love the idea of the "brush." Allow His strokes to soothe your heart and help you forgive yourself and the reasons that caused your reactions, as well.

The strength of your desire is embodied in your poem; it will surely win out over your despair.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

JL
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15 posted 2004-06-08 02:59 PM


Nice one!

JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”


C?
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16 posted 2004-06-08 06:57 PM


this are well formed, indeed.
I like reading your works a lot.
there are a select number of peopel on here who's style I can relate to,
yours is definately one,
enjoyed as always,
Collen

Susan
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17 posted 2004-06-08 07:09 PM


Though bridges may be broken, they can be rebuilt -- that's the incredible thing about love, its resiliency.  My heart to you.  And remember, we are all in the mode of being created, thank heavens for erasers!

Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

Goodknight
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18 posted 2004-06-08 07:37 PM


Sadie - sending love and hugs and energy and spirit to you and to those that were hurt - hoping for love and caring and renewal to warmly wash over all - Paul
steavenr
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19 posted 2004-06-08 09:06 PM


I read the poem and didn't read your comments until a second read...the poem has some fantastic thought processes going on it...loved it...your comments...well as the old saying goes...to err is human; to forgive divine...it still holds true...may those who wish to paint you harshly have the wherewithal to catch a spark of the divine...and paint you with the brush strokes of true forgiveness...
Sadelite
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20 posted 2004-06-10 11:00 PM


Thank you, all.  Last weekend was hell on earth.  I've had a lot of rough times, but I think it was nearing the top of the chart.  You all have and are continuing to help me through it.  
           Sadelite~

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