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marcel
Senior Member

since 2003-03-02

Posts 660
az, usa

0 posted 2004-06-07 10:50 PM

Distant Star

I am undeserving of life's treasures
Whether it be a smile or a joyful cry,
A summer breeze or the smell after the rain;
Not worthy of a kiss from an Angel
Or to hear the laughter of a child;
My heart does not deserve to love without lust
Or the satisfaction of knowing the difference.
I do deserve twice fold the tears and pain I have caused
So I sadly await the sentence of past lovers and death.

But where is the compassion of Cupid's arrows?
Arrows that seem to enjoy the taste of my blood,
Nicking and cutting the word "Fear" into my skin
As I dodge and avoid commitment,
Sprinting to the other side of the rainbow,
Stopping only for a second to smell the fragrance of what could have been---
And she smelled of sweet honey and slightly of bubblegum and roses,
And I found in her an appreciation of innocence;
But she pitied my selfishness
And turned her back to face the glory of the sun
Absorbing its warmth...
And her eyes appeared as two flaming moons
Shining a light on my consciousness,
Making my soul ashamed of its nakedness---
A baring of my sins and confessions
Has me transforming in the shadows
And my eyes appeared as two black moons
Piercing, like the fearless eagle spotting prey
Taking flight into the awaiting skies
Soaring...then fading...
A speck or a sparkling gem in the Heavens,
A star only through my eyes.

Marcel

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2004-06-07 11:10 PM

"And her eyes appeared as two flaming moons
Shining a light on my consciousness,"

Dang, what cool imagery Marcel. This is a thoroughly enjoyable read

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2004-06-07 11:31 PM

So many thoughts caught fire as I read this...
Sometimes distance is a relative term...
Authentic and genuine excellence
TD

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2004-06-07 11:44 PM

Marcel~
Sometimes I read you and cry ... this is one of those times~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

[email protected]

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2004-06-08 10:19 PM

I have an affinity for stars mayself...bumping this back to the top.
Good write.
TD

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-06-09 01:38 AM

good write
great imagery

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2004-06-09 02:29 AM

Maybe, I'm interpreting this incorrectly, but it sounds like you've met your match! Let me know if I misunderstood. At any rate, I really enjoyed reading this. ........jo

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

7 posted 2004-06-09 04:03 AM

stars are never as distant as we believe

just stop being afraid of getting burned.

great imagery, enjoyed this

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2004-06-10 04:23 AM

NIce...James

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