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Incubus Lucidity
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Incubus Lucidity |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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**incubus is used as a synonym for "nightmare" rather than "demon" in the context of this poem**  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
muted, It sings, enjoyed. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent Dawn!! Very much enjoyed! Hugs~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very intriguing read. Very nice. JL  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
"and the moon pours it's soured milk" absolutely love that line. Well Done Dawn Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Really enjoyed! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
From a real dream? Well, anything is possible in a nightmare. I wonder tho, about the change in person, from I to she. ??? |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Muted, Parts of this say Dali to me. Especially liked the spilt milk in the moonlight over wooden floor image. You have so many facets to your writing, Dawn. Sadie |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Krawdad: when I mention "she" i am refering to pandora...pandora slept...like im watching the dream and the scary part of it is actually sleeping...so im left less affected.. you know how wierd dreams can be...but its not an actual dream Ive had, this is just pure make believe thanks everybody for your comments |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
Wake up dawn ... oops you are verry well written and picture perfectly placed. This reminds me of the nightmares i just to have as a little ... ummm i just hope they don't follow me to bed tonight. once again well written Dawn |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
...Lina..Lina...time for nigh nighs...  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
neat...kinda dark...but cool |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
I very much enjoyed reading it. Quite beautiful. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
simply stunning Dawn~ one of your best.....  ~~**~~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
A brilliant write, Dawn, but I do sense tremendous pain of lucidity along with this.  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
very nice, always like the images you accompany your words with |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This poem merits a "Double WOW" ~ So here it is: WOW!!! WOW!!! It captures the imagination!  Wondrously descriptive and ethereal! Sweet dreams! EA |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I was intrigued by the title...captivated by the content...and awed by its effect...very nicely done |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Jo~ i see you dug this old thing up! LOL im glad you enjoyed enough to comment..thank you  Aenimal~ thank you very nice to see you visit thisEarth Angel~ a double wow?? WOW thank you  steavenr~oh my! thank you so much...."captivated" , thats a very nice compliment |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah little girl... you capped the moon and tipped the tides with this one... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Always liked the spill of moon on the floor, myself. But this conjures a different meaning. Many liquids pour from this... |
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