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Beauty Sleep
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Beauty Sleep |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Beauty Sleep I’ve broken my word again, broke it like always; told you there’d be dust on this bottle by now but here I am at three a.m., looking for numb so I can be all right, or pretend well enough to pass. It’s not the love, it’s what comes behind it running me like a wolf or a post-trauma lockup. This doesn’t cure, nothing will. Right now I don’t care, stranded in the dark of me and the day, looking for the right recipe of pills and alcohol so I can be unconscious until dawn gives me an excuse, levers me awake or whatever this is I’m in. One of these daynights I’ll hit a mismatch on one of them but at least I won’t feel it. Sometimes even this doesn’t work but everything has a price, and if this is the cost of loving you then it’s cheap; I’d pay twice. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
the whole thing is great, but the ending? I love the ending! Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Ohhhhh, James... Sadelite |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This made me cry.... |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
sweet. in the first stanza, i felt a bit unsure about the wolf imagery. nicely written i thought... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sad  |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Great write James! Eric |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The first lines let me know that this was going to be gripping... still I didn't expect to be touched so powerfully. I have long acquaintance with 3 am's... and reading this Right now I don’t care, stranded in the dark of me and the day, looking for the right recipe of pills and alcohol so I can be unconscious until dawn gives me an excuse, levers me awake or whatever this is I’m in. brought tears... both of sympathy and empathy. *S* But then... what an incredible ending! For yes... some things are worth any price. and if this is the cost of loving you then it’s cheap; I’d pay twice. Fantastic work! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
 You gotta do somethin' about this situation....... take care.  ....jo |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
This is a great piece of writing. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Kevin |
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