Overflown (a duet with misao)

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2004-06-05 02:28 AM

She fidgets
so unsure
of word
as her mind
sings
overflown
chantings
of these precious things
rantings
rattling her wings
amazed
that no one else had heard
the images
of feathering
in the fields
of heathering
her smile--
a symphony of "coo".

She sighed
a violin
and strings
shrugged
"it doesn't mean a thing"
an orchestra
of her protest--

"I guess it has to do."

MGROVES

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1 posted 2004-06-05 02:51 AM

enjoyed this

passing shadows
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2 posted 2004-06-05 02:56 AM

iliana
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3 posted 2004-06-05 03:29 AM

A symphony for sure! Loved it, you two!

.......jo

wranx
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4 posted 2004-06-05 09:38 AM

This will do fine, m'witch and misao!

I've been wondering when you two would say something together.

uncle yeti

Sadelite
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5 posted 2004-06-05 10:08 AM

very cool! More!!!
Sadie

GG
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6 posted 2004-06-05 10:17 AM

I agree...
more!!!
This is great!

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
Joyce kilmer

Martie

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7 posted 2004-06-05 04:26 PM

serenity and misao

"chantings
of these precious things
rantings
rattling her wings
amazed
that no one else had heard
the images"

I hear them loud and clear!

suthern

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8 posted 2004-06-05 04:59 PM

amazed
that no one else had heard
the images
of feathering
in the fields
of heathering

This definitely has to do... for it couldn't get much better! LOL Excellent work! *S*

Mysteria

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9 posted 2004-06-05 05:46 PM

Oh my!
The sure doesn't fall far from the tard thank goodness!

Midnitesun

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10 posted 2004-06-05 05:57 PM

can I just say

BRAVO!
?

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

11 posted 2004-06-05 05:58 PM

Ser and misao..
Excellent!!
Loved this so much!
Hugs to you both~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

garysgirl

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12 posted 2004-06-05 06:12 PM

chantings
of these precious things
rantings
rattling her wings
amazed
that no one else had heard

I heard.....

She sighed
a violin
and strings
shrugged
"it doesn't mean a thing"
an orchestra
of her protest--

I loved this part, too.

Very good writing, you too.

Hugs to you both,

Ethel

brian sites
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13 posted 2004-06-06 12:13 PM

yep....

may I present to you

...........a snoopy dance

YAY!!

Dark Angel
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14 posted 2004-06-06 04:47 AM

chantings
of these precious things
rantings
rattling her wings
amazed
that no one else had heard
the images

I'm with Martie... I hear them loud and clear too.

Wonderful both of you... more please.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

15 posted 2004-06-06 09:57 AM

'bout time!

Skyfire

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16 posted 2004-06-06 05:24 PM

*bows*

You're both amazing

Janet Marie
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17 posted 2004-06-07 11:45 AM

*smiling*...
I have said before...
there is something in the water there.

As always Im tardy...but I wanted to tell you both how lovely and poetically nsync this is

serenity blaze
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18 posted 2004-06-07 01:05 PM

smiles, curtseys and thanks...

Misao and I wrote this one over on the porch to the tune of a buzzsaw.

We appreciate your reading and I'm sure she'll be popping in to say thank you soon.

(Won't you?)

Yes, she will, smiles mom.

Ratleader

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19 posted 2004-06-11 12:54 PM

I like the style of this, dropped in single notes and little chords...like music that plays in your head and you don't know where you heard it...

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Sunshine

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20 posted 2004-06-11 12:54 PM

honey...I know it's a bit early?

But...

heh...

Happy Birthday....

misao
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21 posted 2004-06-13 01:35 PM

yay! he. ^_^ thanks for the replies. And Serenty says thanks to Sunshine. Happy Birthday to Seren again!

Susan Caldwell
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22 posted 2004-06-22 12:03 PM

Wonderful blend!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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