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Mr. Right
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Mr. Right |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada 
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 Mr. Right A full flickering moon’s reflection Shimmers on her freshly washed dishes. A million stars explode in ebony, Like those long lost summer kisses. Her body, and mind so full of day’s weary, Sits down, sinking so deep into though. She misses her friend, and also her lover, Knowing full well that she should not. He gave his love freely but she turned away. Somehow he'd failed a checklist she'd made. He was so smart, lovable, funny, and kind, How did she think that he'd failed the grade? She wiped away a tear in her eye with a sigh. She won’t need to worry about him anymore. While looking for that perfect man in her life, She sent Mr. Right, right out of her door! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sometimes that happens, doesn't it. Enjoyed the writing, Mysteria, and hope Mr. Right comes back around.  |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
oh yes, know that feeling. dont know why we do it but we do. enjoyed this and the pic with it |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I felt the pain of lost love in your words Sharon. Sometimes it's hard to see what you've got until you lose it. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
You get a huge nod of understanding from me on this one.. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
But he kept his door open for her anyway, didn't he? He was indeed a smart one... And she surely entered when she dared - Also a smart cookie. Both smart enough to cook up some wonderful memories...  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Does Mr Right have a brother????  Bittersweet write poetess Sharon...rhymes of truth.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful, truthful write here Sharon. Sometimes we don't realize it was Mr. Right until it's too late. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Ain't that the troooooooth! The wrong man keeps a woman from finding the right man ~ or letting the right man get away! As Erma Bombeck wrote, "The Grass Is Greener Over the Septic Tank"! So often we do not appreciate what we have in our own back yard and look for that greener grass which can turn out to be septic to us! I'm sure this poem will be a wake up call for some of your readers. A responsible poem written with flair!  Big hugs to a fellow Canuck! Linda |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
We're all wrong at some time - right others, and hindsight is such a learning experience, wonderful teacher, if only next time we remember the lesson . . . then again, is Mr/Ms Right truly that or an illusion fed by someone we perceive to be less . . . isn't Mr/Ms Right truly the one we keep? (discounting the ones that go bad in the process, that is). Kind of the story about the one that got away, isn't it - he/she always gets better and better. Loved this very apt, well written piece Mysteria - as always. jwesley |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Yep! Ain’t it so. As the song says: “You don’t know what you got tell it’s gone.” Good one! JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Since I love happy endings... Please wipe away the tears cause Mr. Right is very wise and knows of your fears. Mr. Right hears the pain that is hidden in the corners of your mind and will return to your embrace. And love will flourish happily ever after. See I told ya I love happy ending. Hugs BonBon  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Understanding this one very much Sharon. Hugs gal. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sadly beautifully sad |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am quoting Earth Angel here ~ "The wrong man keeps a woman from finding the right man ~ or letting the right man get away!" Now that is the truth! Just a poem ladies, although I have had my share of Mr. Wrongs, and Mr. Rights. Funny thing is, and at the time, loved them all the same Thanks for reading this one I woke up with it in my head in the middle of the night (see, night rhymes with right - that is how a muse works I guess?)Nan, you know me far too well - that is the last time I stay with you that long - whew, says Nan! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Sharon, So I'm confused. Was Mr. Wrong standing in for Mr. Right? Or did Mr. Right keep going when he saw Mr. Wrong? And what was wrong with Mr. Right anyway? Was Mr. Wrong dressed like the big bad wolf and it coulnd/t be figured out?  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
ah, yes, the man that got away. wonderful write Sharon. hugs,Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Well told story, too often too true for both sexes. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
All to often (at least in my lifetime) and certainly in one man I can think of - we find fault with someone who doesn't meet all the criteria we have set up as that perfect Mr. Right or Mz. Right. I truly now believe that if we expended more energy into accepting them as they are, and embracing it (as trust me, there is no Mr. or Mz. Right) we would have one big, happy world! Thanks again for reading. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I agree 1000 percent...James |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
"A million stars explode in ebony," This line about knocked my socks off, drenching them in immediate emotion! Very powerful line! Excellent. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
James Michael and Sadelite, I really appreiciate your time in reading my poem, and thank you so much. I am delighted if you enjoyed it. |
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