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rectangular space stammerings |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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I drew my boundaries territory markings finding space for my paces odd first, then even before curling my toes inward east in the rising sun west where shadows walk north while desperate winds blow south my feet lay trapped indolent leaden-footed under trappings of a whirlpool in which swerve some expendable nothing really matters thoughts I’m in my rectangle and it is time to turn flush dammed water will rush down breaking free torrentially to clean the dirt under the thick nails of my toes in their naked coldness they would further curl [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (06-03-2004 03:42 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
indolent leaden-footed under trappings of a whirlpool in which swerve some expendable nothing really matters thoughts I have those thoughts all the time, Sudhir interesting wordings *s M |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Awesome writing my smiling friend. hugs, Chris  Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
excellent! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You stammer so well! Your way of looking at things is completely unique -- that's something I value both in people and in poems. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yes excellant! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my...this is excellent! Well done Sudhir...much enjoyed the read today. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
you do string words together in absolutely captivating ways, I love the "west where shadows walk" line so very much. Of course, I live in "the west," but west can be anywhere, can't it. As usual, I enjoyed the reading of your poetry. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I really admire your writing style and such a unique way of saying this.  ....jo |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Another very fine write, m'friend. And you say English is your second language, eh? You wield it better than the natives LOL. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Spectular writing, Sudhir! (but I can't say I'm surprised. Your writing is always amazing!) I truly enjoyed your poem. Sadie |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Friends, I thank you all so very much for coming along, sharing the rectangular space and all the thoughts and words that it holds... Regards Sudhir |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I echo Ratleader  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
you see the hues of life, which is a gift and your poems are so enjoyable...thank you for sharing. Hugs |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very nice write. Enjoyed. JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Welcome to the stammer Thanks a lot, dear friends... Regards Sudhir |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I agree with Ratleader and wranx... If this is stammering, teach me how to speak. *S* Excellent write! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
my dear friend... you are so kind... regards sudhir |
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