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Streaking against clouds...
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Streaking against clouds... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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He is the eventual loophole of my every day a circulatory dance throughout a circus of veins I'm making a fool of myself a mockery of every gift in breath I heartlessly consume skipping clueless inbetween surfaces of black so pale and visible never coming to terms with the undeniable fact I'm streaking against clouds and he'll never see me. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"He is the eventual loophole of my every day a circulatory dance throughout a circus of veins I'm making a fool of myself" Gem, I feel like I'm repeating myself (perhaps because I am...lol) but I'm at a loss what else to say except that your writing amazes me. I don't think you can write a bad line. Wow...'nuff said.  |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
A mockery ... no way! and that photo ... blew me away! Have to admit, the title lured me in ... and I wasn't disatisfied!! Ditto to Duncan's awe! *S |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
his loss... you're a beautiful person and your gorgeous. beautiful writing Gem... I'm keeping it. Maree  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i know the feeling, yes i do you write it so well |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"a circulatory dance throughout a circus of veins" ~ how on Earth do you come up with these innovative and brilliant concepts! I suppose it is due to the fact that you yourself are innovative and brilliant!  Love ya lots! Lindy |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
how could he not see that beauty on the inside? You are a gem, your writing is brilliant, and if he doesn't value the who of you, then he's losing a very unique and special young lady! |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...!!!!! Eric |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Oh yeah! This is a beauty! JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
streaking against clouds is very good regards sudhir |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Gemma~ Love the write ... love the new photo~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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