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Invitation to Burn
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Invitation to Burn |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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The candle has been burning at both ends And the flame is growing near To scorch of hand I reach for you to help me You, an apparition Of what I thought you were Of what I wished you to be I have lost track of whom Put match to wick Just knowing I want it to stop Burning me so Yet I can’t just let go And walk away Letting the flame Slowly burn out So I wear the blisters Of my own invite "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
funny how your thinking of nothing at all, then, like it was just yesterday, in floats a memory vision... Lovely write  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I was going to highlight certain verses Susan when I realized they mesh so well there is no way to separate them.....well for me anyhow because I am identifying with this so very much right now... Hugs girl.... |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Sometimes it's like that, yes. Enjoyed. Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"The candle has been burning at both ends" ... "So I wear the blisters Of my own invite" ~ Sending you some of the salve that I have had to use from time to time. Healing hugs, Linda |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
So I wear the blisters Of my own invite wow, no ones ever said it like that. love the blister-burn concept. Oh how we love to self inflict! xx |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"So I wear the blisters Of my own invite" Susan -- amazing lines throughout, but these last two......... sensational!  ...jo |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Okay I must confess...the last line Duncan edited (don't send anything to him you DON'T want edited...) the word "invite" was from Duncan. But thank you all for the wonderful responses.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Such a sad story and depicted so well with the candle lit at both ends analogy. Great write. JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I don't care, it's the whole thing, pretty lady. So give yourself credit. (and, nice one Dunc.) some more beautiful, aching lines... I have lost track of whom Put match to wick Just knowing I want it to stop Burning me so |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Awesome write Susan I have lost track of whom Put match to wick Just knowing I want it to stop Knowing doesn't help anyway |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"I reach for you to help me You, an apparition Of what I thought you were Of what I wished you to be" Very cool verse, it's got a distinct ethereal tone. But I would've thought you'd be used to the  by now. "the last line Duncan edited (don't send anything to him you DON'T want edited...)" First, let me say...  I guess this means you'd rather I not offer my editing service unless solicited in the future??? Sure, no problem. As I recall, I thought your choice of word was...perfect.  |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
I love this piece susan! amazing job as always |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
o those blasted blisters, you wear them well in this one |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
nicely penned... regards sudhir |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
so...you are hot enough to raise blisters???? WOW! *grin* |
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