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Pocket Veto
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Pocket Veto |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Pocket Veto Clouds run ashore all day promising what we ask. “Soon, soon,” they say in turns of gray under gray. It deepens through the afternoon, all horizon inland gone, wind lifting in the cooling air, but no rain comes. Slowly gray gives way to white and shades of blue, until a pale yellow sunset and a few desultory stars. All night the river rises. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
all night the river rises and faints new colors for a dawn..... nature's universal patterns, woven explicidly for all of us...outstanding write |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Good write, enjoyed the read. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"soon, soon"... ~*~ Yes! |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wonderful writing  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You had me with the title. *S* For I think I'd rather be given an honest NO that at least indicates I'm worthy of an answer... than be left to accept that apathy says no, also. *S* But whatever paths my thoughts were on prior to reading the rest of your words, your incredible images grabbed my attention! *S* This is magnificent, my friend. *S* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Indeed the weather changes ...its patterns are so hard to predict. Perhaps, "soon, soon" is a postive way to view the possibility of many things. I enjoyed the imagery and thought behind this poem.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Enjoyed this Mr Rat,(hope you don't mind me calling you that, term of endearment *smile*) wonderful imagery ... I saw the day change before my eyes.  Maree. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Ahhh...the ebb and flow of nature's harmony...well captured here...alot is going on here on a lot of levels...and the cycle continues... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I take it the storm has hit -- of course, my interpretaton may be way off. Anyway, it's always interesting to take a stab at deciphering your analogies and metaphors, and always enjoy your writing. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I thought of this last night... and your work is always worth another visit. *S* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I only sigh when I read you...sigh and look out the window to drift momentarily |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
You are a master of subtle image. I salute you! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Ratleader, I couldn't agree more with icebox. You also have great versatility as shown in your Little Red Riding Hood Poem. Enjoyed the title and quality poem. Sadie |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Nice pic you have painted with few words. Well done. I enjoyed it quite a bit. Kevin |
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