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Reflections on Grief - III
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Reflections on Grief - III |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Dealer's Choice Grief is unpredictable Shattering families It turns lovers into strangers Who’ve nothing in common But the bleakness it wraps them in It can also forge Unsought, unbreakable bonds Between those who know its searing And seek to survive its fires It steals breath from lungs And disconnects a beating heart Before disappearing Leaving welcome numb Only to wage a sneak attack That drains color from a day With screech and screams It is writhing prima donna Demanding center stage Portraying the agonies of the damned Then walks in dignified silence Unobtrusive to all But discerning eyes Preparation for its arrival Does not lessen its capriciousness There’s no way to predict What hand might be yours Its only consistency Is its reluctance to leave |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
It is writhing prima donna ........ I know those words  only you write them so much better... more to come, hopefully? regards sudhir |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"With screech and screams It is writhing prima donna Demanding center stage Portraying the agonies of the damned Then walks in dignified silence Unobtrusive to all But discerning eyes" You write with such truth and wisdom. I am speechess.... Well done! Hugs~ |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
again...was gonna quote my fav verse, but would quote the whole thing....this series is so powerful, so well written...and the only one other thing that grief posseses is the ability to lighten itself by sharing...and you have lightened mine |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"It can also forge Unsought, unbreakable bonds Between those who know its searing And seek to survive its fires" I know this to be true. Every line -- very wise.  ......jo |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
It steals breath from lungs And disconnects a beating heart Before disappearing Leaving welcome numb Only to wage a sneak attack That drains color from a day how I feel...today... I have felt the many disguises grief takes on... I enjoyed your series from the onset. M |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Laura, this is masterful....this trio of poems has to be one of the best works I've seen in this site. In the past you've shared with me the feeling that your poetry doesn't compare to that of the quality poets here.... Don't be saying that any more, Suthern gal -- you just proved you are one of them. I was riveted to these poems from the first line to the last, simply couldn't pause to reply to one before going on to the next. Well done! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Again, thank you! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You nailed it m'friend, simply nailed it. I wish I could say I don't know this but I do, and it stings again with your words here, for one thing is certain the predictability of knowing its persistance. I do believe in all I have read of yours this is about the most excellent work you have done in my opinion. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Southern, one can certainly tell from these writings that you have experienced grief first hand. Wishing you peace, friend. Corinne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It can also forge Unsought, unbreakable bonds Between those who know its searing And seek to survive its fires It steals breath from lungs And disconnects a beating heart Before disappearing Leaving welcome numb Only to wage a sneak attack That drains color from a day With screech and screams It is writhing prima donna Demanding center stage Portraying the agonies of the damned Then walks in dignified silence Unobtrusive to all But discerning eyes Preparation for its arrival Does not lessen its capriciousness ======================================= I have to ditto that above accolades..this series is indeed among your best work...powerful expression with a grasp of vocabulary that speaks profoundly...and a depth of emotion that defines all thats been lost and denied. The irony is in knowing that to write from this depth, one has known this sorrow far too often. You speak for those that may not have the expression of gifted pen. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhSweetestSuthernGal~ 'Its only consistency Is its reluctance to leave' You are such a masterful poetess, the feelings wrap me in their certainty~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Sweet lady, I must remind you how happy I am that you are here. You know more than I would wish for you and share more than I could ask. Thank you. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
dang double dang triple dang you've outworded grief, m'friend I am keeping this series  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I cannot tell you how much your responses mean to me... I can only say I cherish each and every one. From the bottom of my heart, I thank you... I'm stunned and humbled that so many of you have taken the time to read and respond to all 3 parts... I'm grateful for you... collectively and individually. *S* THANK YOU!!! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Three new arrivals means the first three get a bump! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
"Its only consistency Is its reluctance to leave" This is where our strength must endure. I am weeping inside For here is where a momentary touch can pave the way towards healing SG |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ratleader: You are a gift, my friend... I thank you so much!! Simply Gold: That's absolutely lovely... Thank you so very much!!! |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Boy do I know this one. I lost friends (that needed to be lost, sadly, anyway) from grieving... but I gained the closest and truest friends from it, also. It's strange how it completely alters your perspectives in life... I've got these three in my library now... Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
oops! Now the three are in my library  Poems are made by fools like me, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ruth, I read this back in June... but it was much too...true... and I found myself unable to say what I wanted to say... and still do. You, my dear, have a gift. |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
It steals breath from lungs And disconnects a beating heart Before disappearing Leaving welcome numb Only to wage a sneak attack That drains color from a day With screech and screams It is writhing prima donna Demanding center stage Portraying the agonies of the damned I surely know this feeling.. but you wrote it with words... Pepper |
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