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the third movement
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the third movement |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Every thing I do is you and I blush at my cliche Everything I feel was said in words repetitive as dead as nails in coffin lids of poems... God I wish to speak as new as the way I feel with you God I hold my head in hands rocking no one understands Every thing I knew is true I'm crushed when I'm revealed by you Everything intense I feel colors play upon the field cradling this curve of Bach I'm weeping in the audience hush me in his movement now thinking I could die again strangled by the taut of string singing me my joy of pain... as I think again cliche no one understands I'm dead listening to shoveled sand as I'm quickened in my grave... tossing words upon the roof-- Everything I do is you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
not sure what to say here...but I loved this piece of you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Karen, tremendously intense and passionate -- and in my library she goes. A cliche response...WOW! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
GOD! The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Well Blaze..ya done good..your stuff's always interesting and makes one think...After my third movement I took some Kaopectate....they all make me think of Balladeer and it was getting really boring (and sore).....How ya doin' gal?....I figured I'd stay over here to keep outta trouble on the discussion boards....being a fairly conservative person in a liberal world ain't easy...then ya add being a Toerag on top of that....it really gets bad.... |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Oh my, the passion of lover's longing; the passion of the poet searching, pushing edges; Your Muse is working beautifully here...~P |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
God I wish to speak as new as the way I feel with you ================================= yeessssss... yesssss..yessss... yes oh baby...do I ever understand.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Was "told" to play piano last night... un-practiced, unwilling... unable to appease another's request... so this has a double-edge of knowing every thing for me today.  |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
first movement the billow of sky to all four corners second movement the feathered soul flying, intersecting the sky third movement an indiscriminate ripping in half leaving parts of one in the other fourth movement resolvement of conflict, initial theme restored  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
It is important sometimes to go Bach to basics! *grin* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, If you spit into the wind, check the direction. LOL |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
uhm... wow. I'm putting it in my library. I think thank you is the closest thing to what I can't find the words to say... Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"God I wish to speak as new as the way I feel with you God I hold my head in hands rocking no one understands" *bowing* "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You see? I do read you, more than once. Who was it said, "publish"? Publish. Honey, don't wait. People need you. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Some of Bach slays me, as well, as some of your poems do, Karen -- this one in particular! Outstanding third movement! .....jo[This message has been edited by iliana (06-27-2004 04:24 AM).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
There are no words somtimes. Very well expressed, Serenity! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Me thinks it worked? You are a Goddess you know that right? Right? You are now back to basics, oh grouty one! Love ya! |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hello Serenity. Bravo! Hell yeah this is a wonderful piece. You just brought the biggest smile I have known in a while to my face. I love this piece dear friend. Aboslutely LOVE it! I love the way it all ties in to classical music. It has been too long since I listened to it. For a moment I could hear the notes again within my mind. Thank-you! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Karilea is right..."People need you!" Publish m'gorgeous lady. Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
loved your poem; I saw a movie about his life once-it makes me appreciate this even more. A marvelous composition, serenity blaze miscellanea |
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