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green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
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New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2004-05-31 04:57 PM



Simple and ignorant
He's easy to skim right by
A project life
And a hole in the earth
Open up a crack

Just to be a little different
A job, full time career
Foollishness dwells in him
A two piece mind
Do this and get that
Do that and get...
Just confused

Task of living with events
A little pouch of saddness inside
Pick it up and drop it back
Open the reality in his head
Has he ever won anything
Loser

Judgement set in stone by the proud
Their own kind of folly
In which they boast ignorantly
Only to fall on themselves
And become elements to a collection of art
A painting
Decorations

Silence and I can't hear a thing
Its hard to focus
This whole thing is rounded out and orange
Like a disease in the lungs
True disgust and rotten bones

© Copyright 2004 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
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1 posted 2004-05-31 05:20 PM


"Just to be a little different
A job, full time career
Foollishness dwells in him
A two piece mind
Do this and get that
Do that and get...
Just confused"

So many people are caught up in this category, and too many in the other, too.  But, there are some who've been able to escape either, believe it or not! it's a matter of TIME.  Very interesting writing.  


green_itchy_stuff
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2 posted 2004-05-31 11:31 PM


Thank you I was almost embarrassed about posting it because I wasn't sure if it sounded solid enough to make any sense, but I guess that adds to the poem.  thanks again.

GIS

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
3 posted 2004-06-01 12:00 PM


I understand
River
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since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
4 posted 2004-06-14 01:36 AM


this makes me want to ask...who is he? he sounds like people I know. anyways, I didn't think it was hard to understand. you talk about a person...who...dude! read my last one, Skeleton Fears. it's about this same type of person! wierd...

     - Bonnie Sue

Running out of pain

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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5 posted 2004-06-14 01:44 AM


"A two piece mind
Do this and get that"

Really great lines here!

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519

6 posted 2004-06-14 10:12 AM


I liked the two piece mind line, too.  It goes great with your title and is spelled out within your poem.  
                

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