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sleeping with my eyes open |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Sleeping with my eyes open The street is wet and it reflects light of ghost from thin red post I take a step, heel to toe to walk a path of the damned with a bourbon in my hand all alone outside myself the rivers hiss and bagpipes drone and in climb of “get over it” I stomp my foot in silent greet sleeping with my eyes open there you stand dressed in black a shadow dancing silence wrapped and as you flick your eyes at me I yield the ground beneath my feet Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. (by Virginia Woolf) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (04-21-2004 12:14 AM).] |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
OMG, this is an awesome poem.. the words seem to relate a sadness, but indiferrence speaks louder....youve delicately played the reader here. very good! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
some nights can do that to ya  I know of a few myself |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
ooooohhhhh, sounds scary, Maree. LOL Made me think of the ghost stories that my Grandmother used to tell us as kids. I loved them. LOL Hugs, Ethel |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Powerfully expressed nightly visions! Love, Margherita  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree You create quite a mood....dark and cold and something to brave for tears.  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
all alone outside myself the rivers hiss and bagpipes bleep and in climb of “get over it” I stomp my foot in silent greet No matter how old we are, sometimes it is difficult to not want what we don't have and act out....very good write |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi Everyone, thanks for your lovely comments and replies.. I appreciate them so much... this was just another dream, not sure if they're going forward or backward. I suppose I'll find out soonish enough. Thanks again Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Never bite the hand of the muse that feeds you... it was said before, I'll ditto... this IS an awesome poem! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh my, what a haunting vision this is Maree. Like a magic carpet ride, made me dizzy! There is nothing better than a poem that takes me there. Thank you, thank you! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Awesome...awesome write. Hugs sweet lady~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Naw, the bourbon in your hand couldn't have had anything to do with losing the ground beneath your feet, so I won't even go there... This I think is the best of your's I've read yet, my friend, and I try to read them all because each is so well done. Lifting my "bourbon" . . . to you... jwesley |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Karilea, unfortunately there's fat chance of me doing that  Thank you darlin.Ms Blues, glad you enjoyed the ride and thank you for your lovely comment Enchantress thank you for the Awesome.. and hugs back at ya Jwesley, perhaps it was the bourbon I had that evening that sent me sleeping with my eyes open heh. Thank you kind sir. Thank you all Maree Have you any dreams you'd like to sell? |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Okay, this may sound weird, but this reminded me of a time I spent in Ireland... the drink in hand, wet pavement, bagpipes playing through the windows... and dark figures in the night. Cool! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
a shadow dancing silence wrapped ================================ how cool is that line and image... So what does one eat before bed to dream poetry? very cool write poetess Maree. ... and it's you ... you ... you ... you ... |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Hey, good to see you. I loved the image this conjured up...and the feelings too. Cold, dark, sort of fearful in a way...you've always been the queen of imagery. Keep it up. ~*Krista Lee Knutson*~ |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Been there, done that, don't want to again... Very well said! INclan |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
"all alone outside myself the rivers hiss and bagpipes drone and in climb of “get over it” I stomp my foot in silent greet" Silent greet..indeed... as always dear one... truly a piece to enjoy and to think about.... many nights tinged as they are with smoked bourbon tastes from tumbler and ice both fitting hand and soul I slept not |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I stomp my foot in silent greet ... I yield the ground beneath my feet .......... enjoyed your words so very much, Maree... regards sudhir |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
And do you think you'd be allowed to close them in the first place? An interesting notion, but unlikely..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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