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A Soldier's Story - In Honor of those who served
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A Soldier's Story - In Honor of those who served |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
There's nothing different about the man as he passes you on the street a few lines have formed along his brow and he's slower on his feet He smiles at children as they play frowns at tattoes on a young teen an ordinary man you think? but you don't know what he as seen jungle wet with rain and sweat rivers of mud and enemy blood eyes in pain no loss or gain arms held back in mass attack He won't tell you what he knows nor why it haunts his dreams he keeps it within, this secret past that hides behind silent screams jungle wet with rain and sweat rivers of mud and enemy blood eyes in pain no loss or gain arms held back in mass attack Don't dare to say he never gave what his country asked him to give don't tell him that you hate this place his friends died so you could live jungle wet with rain and sweat rivers of mud and enemy blood eyes in pain no loss or gain arms held back in mass attack A flag waves in bright sunlight By soldier right, he should be proud But he walks on by, no salute His patriotism is not allowed [i]jungle wet with rain and sweat rivers of mud and enemy blood eyes in pain no loss or gain arms held back in mass attack[i] And when you come to understand the freedom he fought to keep Perhaps it will be you my friend that dreams the dream of soldier's sleep. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow, Sharon, this is fabulous! What a wonderful salute to our heroes! I'll bet this could be put to music. If you want maybe I can forward it to my nephew, John? He's a singer/songwriter/musician and a very patriotic kind of guy. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
My, my. My heart is burning and my spirit touched. This is an incredible write and filled with such insight and understanding. Excellent.  SusanThe whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Sharon, this is such an excellent tribute to those who have served. Full of true compassion and thanks. I love it! It's good to read you hear again. Maybe I'd just been reading the wrong forum or not around at the right times, but I hadn't seen you here for quite awhile. Hope you're all safe and sound there at your new place Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 Thank you for this profound write Sharon. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
PDV...amazing write |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Excellent write PdV. God Bless all of those who stand/stood on guard for all of us. hugs, Chris |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW SHARON..just Wow. I'm adding this to my library. Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sharon a much needed write these days, and done extremely well. I too think it could be a song, with a tiny bit of work, and a darn good one too  Sometimes you just made me bust my seams yanno? |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Poet deVine -- This reminds me of a friend of mine who cam back from Viet Nam -- he could not talk about it and on the 4th of July -- he could not watch the fireworks or get anywhere near them because the effect they had on him. Few who weren't there could ever possibly understand the sacrifices so many have made. Thank you for sharing this really effective writing with us.  ...jo |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you for your kind words. This is about a Vietnam Vet as that is my generation's war. I pray that someday there won't be such a thing as war. If we could just learn to get along.... |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Sharon, damn girl, this was an awesome write! you had me holding on to the very last word, gave me chills, but made me smile, and made me proud to live in the USA. Thank you for writing this, it needed to be read and heard. Take care, amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
very powerful and intelligent write with heart and tribute to many times these mere 'boys' that have endured what we could never grasp unless in their boots |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you make me want to call my father... but too many years have gone now, too much bitterness and anger of childhood there |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing Denise...James |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Very powerfull, I was moved by this. ~Live and Laugh~ The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You may have written about the soldier from one war... but you wrote for them all. And this veteran's daughter thanks you. *S* |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Absolutely beautiful sweets.... |
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