Open Poetry #32 |
Feather |
Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Feather Life is a lone gray bird of undetermined kind, flying slow away; I don’t know how long it will remain in sight or how to call it back. A single feather remains, a cast off token that drifted down to me. I take it up, hold it in my fingers twirl it quick then slow, following the play of shadow over its directional silk, some lighter shades in the down of it, the slow darkening outward along its length, and the indefinable curve sheens of light along on the surface, somehow reflected from the smooth unsmoothness there. I begin to see or maybe imagine hints of depth, color, shifts of blue, even pink, but not enough, not nearly enough. And how could there be enough? It is after all only a feather that fell to me in passing from a lone gray bird I held in my hand once, now flying slow away. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (05-31-2004 02:33 AM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed I have been picking up feathers that have fallen in my path for a long time now, thinking they are tokens sent from some wider spirit telling me something, although I'm never quite sure what. I keep them anyway. The texture of this poem is beautiful, and the underlying feeling of sadness hurts to read. A tender, thought filled write, dear friend...so glad to see it here this morning. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
feathers...aerodynamic masterpieces in themselves! Very interesting reflections and observations of the gift; Enjoyed! Have a great weekend. Sadie |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I really felt this and loved the analogy. I wonder, if you collect enough feathers, could you create your own bird? Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
touching write, makes me think |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I get so lost in your incredible images... only to find so many life truths in the depths of your words. What life leaves us sometimes seems so insignificant and incomplete... but it's what we make of it... you've made a study in art and emotion out of the merest wisp of wing. Elegant excellence, my friend. |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
One little feather a delicate masterpiece of color and design. Good One. BonBon |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Another great write! Eric |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Ed....sometimes even a single feather's enough to fly |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
RatL -- I can't tell you what I really feel about this poem because you would think me wacked! Let's just say....feathers are very symbollic in many cultures, sometimes even spiritual.....and, then, there's the quill......enjoyed your poem. ....jo |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
this brought me a sense of tranquility, very peacefull images. I really enjoyed it. ~Live and Laugh~ The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow |
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