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rainydaymusic Junior Member
since 2004-01-14
Posts 26 |
Watched the sun set, felt it grow cool, had the one I love on my mind. My soul, it renders my eyes blind and I know this cause you can’t see God. Still, I could have seen you, tonight. But you would not have let me touch you (and that is fine.) In God’s presence, anyway, I am bland. (But who cares? Do you believe what I say?) My words cannot describe this world, not like they can your pretty, lovely body. (I write for you, please hear me!) And I am not good at moving my hands through the soil, not like I could your hair; or getting my knees bloody from working, I am not good at this, not good like I do when I pray to you, or when I preach to you that I love you, (and I do, damn I do.) I watch serpents slither by me as it gets dark; there is glory just past these snakes in the marsh, And the cries of geese will echo down the walls; it is in their sound I cease to hear anything at all. They’ve got a tongue of their own but a nature that is mine. Who puts this pen in my hand? My inspiration or my faith? My love or my life? And to whom should I cry? (Do you understand when I cry?) |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
enjoyed the read of this quite powerful write. jwesley |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Very enjoyable. Thanks for sharing! Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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pictureme Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 248Ohio, USA |
The pen in the hand inspired by the faith of love of a life~ I understand your cry! pictureme :-) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Much emotive pull in this poem...I felt it! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi there RDM..Enjoyed this very much... especially this.... I watch serpents slither by me as it gets dark; there is glory just past these snakes in the marsh, And the cries of geese will echo down the walls; it is in their sound I cease to hear anything at all. They’ve got a tongue of their own but a nature that is mine. Fantastic!  Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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rainydaymusic Junior Member
since 2004-01-14
Posts 26 |
thanks for the responses |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
How excellent the power and construction of this verse. TD |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A powerful outpour of your heart. Love, Margherita |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
RDM, this is a very strong and emotional write. I felt it. Thanbks for sharing. Hugs, Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I understand why I understand |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Came back for another read... Extremely well expressed. TD |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Some great lines in this piece RDM! Very much enjoyed the read. Hugs~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very nice read. JL |
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nn Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 75 |
Beautiful |
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