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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I'd love to dance with you real slow drifting in a dawn rose red holding you chest to chest swaying near the pond of beg churling mine beneath the bend of curling there just so... careful cuddle all of me loving just beneath your breath I beg a suckling of neck I am existant in the must of this fitting just between the breasts as if it's perfect pitch a test-- a beg of passing grade? I'd love to dance with you real slow watching how your muscles move capturing this fingering and the way I love you smooth commas rapturing your smile... careful loving all of me forgive me darling if I blink hiding all the intricate of the beasts of shy within in this perfect fit I tend to blush as I just look away... [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (05-29-2004 07:48 AM).] |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
wow, this is beautiful  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! I like this on you! It looks great! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"I'd love to dance with you real slow watching how your muscles move capturing this fingering and the way I love you smooth commas capturing your smile... careful loving all of me forgive me darling if I blink hiding all the intricate of the beasts of shy within in this perfect fit I tend to blush as I just look away..." Karen?... I absolutely LOVE this... and, as always, you bring it to life... I didn't just 'read'... I 'saw'... and I smiled... Love you, lady...  "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Once again, you've done it! The poem is outstanding! ....jo |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Commas capturing your smile....This is really sensuous stuff Celeste! I thoroughly enjoyed the read.. Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
heart pounding here my goodness, nodding yes..this IS nice |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
deep breath in.....smile, this is simply beautiful Karen.  Maree. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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GlisteningRain Member
since 2004-05-06
Posts 103The clouds |
LIke a Goddess |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
You know, it just..makes sense. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
the pause for breath in our long sentences love this Immelle |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"careful loving all of me forgive me darling if I blink hiding all the intricate of the beasts of shy within in this perfect fit I tend to blush as I just look away..." Lovely this... as it danced its way down the page. Beautiful Karen...love it! Hugs pretty lady~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"I'd love to dance with you real slow watching how your muscles move capturing this fingering and the way I love you smooth commas rapturing your smile... careful loving all of me forgive me darling if I blink hiding all the intricate of the beasts of shy within in this perfect fit I tend to blush as I just look away..." Love what you do with punctuation K...  |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Mmmm . . . very sensuous. Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I'd love to dance with you real slow watching how your muscles move capturing this fingering and the way I love you smooth commas rapturing your smile... careful loving all of me forgive me darling if I blink hiding all the intricate of the beasts of shy within in this perfect fit I tend to blush as I just look away... Oh, my Karen....OH MY!!!! This one does blaze, SerenOne...and you know that I LOOOOOVVVEEEEE it!!! Hugs, Ethel |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful! Eric |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 Thanks for reading, and yes, it was a bit different from me, wasn't it? Love is lovely... sighs, hugs and  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'd love to dance with you real slow drifting in a dawn rose red holding you chest to chest swaying near the pond of beg churling mine beneath the bend of curling there just so... careful cuddle all of me loving just beneath your breath I beg a suckling of neck I am existant in the must of this fitting just between the breasts as if it's perfect pitch ======================= *smiling* at you and your alliterated assonance... OH and the poem too... lol  |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
such vivid images, and so beautiful. This might be a favorite from you. I had to go back and read it twice I enjoyed it so much! ~Live and Laugh~ The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Loved this side of you Karen. (and sometimes all it takes is but a simple pause). "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
ummm.... ..come back to steal it into my library |
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