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jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

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0 posted 2004-05-27 09:35 AM

inside
forlorn
and deep
there waits a wail
I give it not life
for mine it seeks
to take

my voice has been stolen
my utterances muted
in silence it waits
a lack of speech
its covering for
a slow
strangulation

if given the reigns
its potential
would quickly
overrun me
bridled or free roaming
there waits a wail
forlorn it seeks
to take

daily I pray the fight
against it
but honesty insists
I admit that my defense
is less than
halfhearted

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-05-27 09:47 AM

Gads, this builds in my chest.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

2 posted 2004-05-27 12:22 PM

Hugging you close in thought and prayer.
Write it out dear lady.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

3 posted 2004-05-27 12:41 PM

sometimes it's that way, isn't it?

rosepetals25

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since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

4 posted 2004-05-27 12:51 PM

Wow.. painful write. Good writing... but so sad

Tara

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2004-05-27 12:54 PM

Oh, my friend... this touches me deeply and in many ways... It's a powerful poem... I ache for my friend... and I know the stifling presence of a gag that makes words useless... the wail is more inviting than the fight. *S*

Excellent work!!!

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2004-05-27 01:26 PM

Heart wrenching poetry. Well written

JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

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7 posted 2004-05-27 02:39 PM

Sunshine….yep, exactly the feeling I write about…..you must know it too….

Enchantress, thank you, prayers are more than welcome

ps….yep…..thanks for the hug

rose, thank you…unfortunately for poets ‘painful’ writes good poems

suthern, you always peg my poems perfectly, seems you know me well…*smile*and yes the power this invitation holds is scary….thank you my friend

JL, thank you

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2004-05-27 06:05 PM

DearestDearestLady~
The ache, oh the ache ... how it holds us prisoner-to-thoughts we wish we didn't have~
I am lifting you in prayer right this moment, reach for His hand ... He is ALWAYS there, my friend~

ALWAYS~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

Sunshine

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9 posted 2004-05-28 01:18 PM

I do, honey. In my own way.
I think you and I could write a book...
we could entitle it "Gut Soup".

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

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Florida

10 posted 2004-05-28 01:24 PM

Wonderfully written.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

11 posted 2004-05-28 02:18 PM

This was painful to read, but I'm
glad that I did...your images are so
vivid...forever etched in the readers
mind, but I'm sure that is how you intend
it...very great write!
Take care,
Amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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USA

12 posted 2004-05-29 07:51 PM

Jellybeans -- this was heartfelt -- hugs sent your way. ....jo

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