Open Poetry #32 |
Your still here.....even if your gone... |
misao Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 50 |
I can feel his pain, happiness, his sorrow to me this love is so dear just to see him hurt like this brings every bitter tear. The blood on my hand from his wound so deep the scar on his heart will not heal the feeling of love stays within him till the very day we fall asleep I think of you.....all the time from now untill the end but the pain I feel inside my heart will not and could never mend. I see you right near me....your name I tryed to call your here by my side you seem so close but oh so far then you vanished....you were never here at all. He came to me in my sleep my tears I tryed to hide he told me, "I need you" I awoke to find him.... by my side.......... "Once the red string of fate has been broken it cant be connected again." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
I really enjoyed this, very touching, a slight bit confusing at the end but I got the impression that it was suppose to be. I can relate in part to this piece so it struck a personall chord in me as well, nicely done. ~Live and Laugh~ The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Emotional and touching. Thank you for sharing it. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes...very touching indeed |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Hi, Misao... You already know my thoughts on this one... but?... I'll tell you again... smile You used your words to reach in and tug on my heart... a very emotional and touching write... and I truly 'felt' it... Nicely done... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Yeah to inunasha(Can't spell) |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I just love this one |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A longing answered. Very touching. Love, Margherita |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I think I read this differently than most of the comments to it I read. I read it like there was someone you loved out of the picture you were still wanting and that wanting hurt the one you were with but loved you all the same -- it made sense to me that way -- good write -- the feelings are felt. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ah heck and and I read this like it was a beloved pet - go figure. That is the beauty of poetry - its up to the reader to take from it what they will. Very nicely done. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
love this one ARCTIC WIND |
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