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A View From Palos Verdes
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A View From Palos Verdes |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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A View From Palos Verdes Pines wait here patient for the rains, for sun and wind off the wide blue sea and for us, above this scrub oak hill where needles pile soft in the shade and a lone dove, at home here, watches from behind her little screen of leaves. There was never a house, only pines, but they build house enough. We look out at sage and waves under a denim sky, the carpet deep, with a few stones scattered like chessmen after the game. The breeze turns salt cool, soft as dovesong. Our meadow is seasoned yellow, mustard flowers sprung today, with fingers of last year’s dill. Along the path below, a willow, incongruous as the ropeswing that whirls us back and back, winding a charm to turn us children for a moment, while the lone gray dove, unused to all this fuss, looks on behind her little screen of leaves. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
In the first stanza, with remembrance of scrub oak, came thought of mustard, and I was going to ask, write of mustard, but in the third stanza, you did... thank you for bring some home to me. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Somehow it's become a very special flower to me, plain and simple as it is. These days I can't look at it without reliving every place and every circumstance I've seen it in, or so it feels. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Plain, simple, hearty...hardy... it survives. Like poetry. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
A beautiful picture painted here. I especially like the references to the dove. Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Ratleader, If you paint this well with words, I would be intrigued at how well you'd paint with a brush! You've masterfully created a scene where I can feel the carpet of pine needles under my bare feet, feel the twists of the rope swing as in the breeze. Glad you dotted this with wild mustard and the dove. Enjoyed this exquisite write! Sadie |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice descriptive writing...James |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I very much enjoyed your colourful view from Palos Verdes! Beautifully descriptive writing!!! Sending you a great big hug, EA |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed The view of your words is beautiful from this chair. Thank you for taking me.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You paint so vividly I can literally see the mustard bending to the breeze... you speak so softly the dove is not threatened into flight... what a beautiful work you've shared with us! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i need a view like that  thank you for sharing yours |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Wow...what poetic musings here. I am humbled by this compilation of words orderly marching through my brain taking my imagination to where it really needs to be..... home........ Robert I thank you for your comments on my poem yesterday. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
A lovely view, wistfulness is felt. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed, I love this picture of your words. You are so good at telling what you see. Thanks for sharing your mind's eye with us.  Hugs, Ethel |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Lovvely words from your pen and heart Sir rat  Mxx The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Along the path below, a willow, incongruous as the ropeswing that whirls us back and back, winding a charm to turn us children for a moment, You give more than an incredible view... you give a lift of spirits that settles into peacefulness... most welcome! *S* |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
lovely ARCTIC WIND |
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