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Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2004-05-23 10:29 AM

Lingering, this void, as large as
a cavern’s mouth, open...consuming.
Hungering to swallow the sun’s rays
that darkness might cover eyes
that glisten the dew of tearful thoughts.

When, I ask? Might the rivers dry and
bring forth the cracked soils before the
healing waters again smooth the earth,
parched and in need of what cannot
be given...only felt with time.

My glass, once empty, filled to brimming
shimmer of countless coursing rivulets.
From eyes that seek again what cannot
walk the path.

Guide me, that I might fall upon the
fountain’s step and feel the sooth of
waters cool.

Hold me, that I may let the sobs of
my anguish fly away, a mere speck
against the blue and cloudless skies
of what is wished to be.

The child of me wishes, waits to
feel again the hand that I held.
That I might not walk our path
alone

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

1 posted 2004-05-23 10:35 AM

When you need it most...in the depths...it will be there. This I know. This is such a beautiful expression of those depths that I'm at a loss for other words.

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garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2004-05-23 10:36 AM

Oh goodness, Barry. This really touched my heart.
I can only imagine how I'm going to feel when
I lose my parents. My Mom is such a good "friend".
My heart goes out to you.

Hugs,

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2004-05-23 10:46 AM

Barry,
Loneliness has many brooks in fact the stones are made of books, full of moss that once was source. And now is gone of course
of cource. Good write my friend.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-05-23 11:23 AM

"The child of me wishes, waits to
feel again the hand that I held.
That I might not walk our path
alone"

Excellent write m'friend...wish I had the answer..
but it does get better with time.
Heart Hugs

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

5 posted 2004-05-23 11:31 AM

Incredible. This truly spoke to me. What fitting imagery.

Smiles -- Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2004-05-23 12:45 PM

Barry, these "blue and couldless skies" hold you dearly and reflect the beauty that leaks out through the tears of your sorrow. I once had a thought...we breath in and out the very essense of all of those before us and they become one with us; then we become the offering of our ancesters, the best they had to give to this time. There is so much love in that thought and there is so much love in your writing. Forgive me if I ramble.

...jo

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2004-05-23 01:01 PM

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-05-23 01:34 PM

Barry, my heart aches for you

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

9 posted 2004-05-23 03:13 PM

Powerful, captivating writing.

Eric

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

10 posted 2004-05-23 04:28 PM

A very moving write Barry.

believe in what your heart feels...

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

11 posted 2004-05-23 05:39 PM

Magnus darling man, I can’t even begin to tell you how this makes my heart ache, I feel the sorrow and the loss so acutely, which just proves what an excellent writer you are.

The words are profoundly moving, the piece so incredibly crafted and I’m awed that you can write so beautifully under such a burden of sorrow.

If in the darkness of sorrow you need a hand to hold reach out and I’ll be there, take care my sweet friend and know you will see the light again

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

Sadelite
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since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

12 posted 2004-05-23 05:51 PM

Lingering, this void, as large as
a cavern’s mouth, open...consuming.
Hungering to swallow the sun’s rays
that darkness might cover eyes
that glisten the dew of tearful thoughts

This describes the feeling so well. I wish there was something I could do or say.
Sadie

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2004-05-24 12:17 PM

Nice...James

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

14 posted 2004-05-24 12:55 PM

Heartbreaking excellence.

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