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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

0 posted 2004-05-21 12:54 PM

Thin smoke scars the air.
A stump burns deep underground.
Hot clay remembers.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2004-05-21 01:24 PM

It's not even yet time
for the Santa Ana winds...

for scorchers such as this.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

2 posted 2004-05-21 02:00 PM

What magnificent smoulder... so much depth in so few words... excellent!!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2004-05-21 07:13 PM

Ed

After the fires in the mountain last year, I went to visit a friend who cares for the dam and walked an area that had been devistated. One of the timbers soaked in kreasote before it was posted...still smoked, and this was months later.

There is often much power and a few well chosen words like these in your poem.

RobertB
Senior Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

4 posted 2004-05-21 08:27 PM

That's cool....maybe I mean "hot".

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

5 posted 2004-05-21 08:28 PM

Can't believe it; we're on the same wavelength again! I've been toiling with idea of writing about clay since about noon yesterday. I wrote it today, but it didn't end up with the theme I intended it to have, but yours accomplished it, and rather well, I might add! Ratleader! Enjoyed.

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

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6 posted 2004-05-21 09:26 PM

Well done, Ed!

Earth's crammed with heaven, and every common bush afire with God, but only he who sees takes off his shoes.
Elizabeth Barrett Browning

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

7 posted 2004-05-23 02:11 AM

RatL -- bravo! And, encore, please!

....jo

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-05-23 05:53 AM

well done

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

9 posted 2004-05-23 06:44 AM

Strong senses evoked.
I can smell the buring....nice ~P

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

10 posted 2004-05-23 03:23 PM

Perfect.

Eric

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

11 posted 2004-05-23 03:25 PM

Very well said!

Charisma

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

12 posted 2004-05-23 04:20 PM

A searing write. Well done.

believe in what your heart feels...

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

13 posted 2004-05-23 07:54 PM

like a silent emotion...wonderful Ed.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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