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Not Really Going Anywhere |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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I’m reaching the end; intangible seems more picturesque than I'd been led to believe. The Void is breathtaking, or maybe...just suffocating. I knew there would be a vacancy waiting for me I'm a regular ya'know? I trust the abandon; secretly we used to meet to talk philosophy and other casualties over a cup of coffee under the flicker of the neon signs reading "exit this way". And who was it that said I had no direction in life? ` ` ` (Lifes a dark comedy,then you die  ) |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
life is a dark comedy...nice write! " trust the abandon; secretly we used to meet to talk philosophy and other casualties over a cup of coffee under the flicker of the neon signs reading "exit this way". ^my favorite part "So what befalls the flawless? |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You bring to light the lingering beatitudes of the exit sign... Yet I see when I read your heart, an open book destined for more. TD |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
has a sad feel to it, for me |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Reads like a play. I was watching this unfold with so many mental pictures. Very nice. JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
"I knew there would be a vacancy waiting for me I'm a regular ya'know?" Hmm.. yes. I liked this. Well described. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write...you have such a handle on your wording. Hugs~ |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
You have such a way with your expression. I can see you two sitting there. I really enjoyed this. Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This does have a sad feel to it.  m'dear. Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"life's a dark comedy"....... well, maybe -- but the best way through it is to laugh at the jokes -- Enjoyed! ....jo |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
... suspension of breath ... and then in the sudden silence ... applause! Death what is it? The gate leading to new plays .... of light! Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
you are all so sweet i promise i didnt write this with a sad tone supposed to be kinda tongue-in-cheek, blaise' (sp?).....just a little darker humour is all. you guys are the best, thanks for stopping by. |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
oh so the light at the end of the tunnel is just the exit sign ? well written buddy. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I appreciate the tongue-in-cheek humour in your dark comedy! lol  I got a chuckle out of MovesInSilence's reply! Love & Light, EA |
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