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Merely feeling down....
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Merely feeling down.... |
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Triskaidekaphobia Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 251In a state of disrepair... |
I never was a junkie, that much I'll always know. I was merely feeling down and gave into the low. I saw a pretty powder, its' face a yellow gold I pumped it in my veins and let the feeling grow. I felt a thousand lovers at every corner of my soul and let them have their way with me, no one has to know. I had uncounted epiphanies contained in single thoughts I felt them change my mind; a thing I never sought. I dreamt a dream of burning, as if the sun were in my blood; I dreamt a dream of water that had come to cool by flood. I saw that this was heaven; real life was never complete Before I found this nectar; this recipe for retreat. I saw that I was perfect and I saw that death is sweet. I always was a junkie, that much I'll never know. I was merely feeling down and gave into the flow. I saw a shocking sight, its' face a yellow grey I screamed it to the mirror and heard the sobbing grow. I felt a thousand pincers at every corner of my soul and let them have their way with me, now everybody knows. I had uncounted epiphanies contained by rabid thoughts I tried to change my mind; a thing I've never sought. I felt a dream of burning, as if the sun where in my blood; I wished I had some water so I could drown by flood. I saw that this was hell on earth; life was all complete Before I found this nectar; this recipe for defeat I saw that I was useless and I saw why death is sweet. I always was a junkie, that much I'll always know. I was merely feeling down and gave into my soul. "And the sun went down, and the stars came out far over the summer sea, |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
am speechless....I have seen this damage...you write with much honesty and insight......*shakes her head and cries*... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Triskaidekaphobia An elegant write. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I actually don't know what to say, but wow! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Incredibly gripping. JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
Oh my goodness! I see you're fairly new, but I'd never guess. Welcome! I'm definitely going to be happy to read your poetry. This was exceptional. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
How very courageous you are to allow us to view inside your soul. Your words chilled me to the bone. I hope your writing brings you comfort. An absolutely powerful read. Take care.......Sue I am in motion I am blue Love is an ocean I'm anchored in you - Shawn Mullins |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
An amazing write in its honesty and sorrow. Susan The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Not only was this a tremendously well written poem, but it was a BRAVE one, as well!  |
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