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Quail and Aphrodite
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Quail and Aphrodite |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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I called her “Sunshine” and it was summer and splendor stripped her of her shift and sandals then, pressed her into the tall grass beside me We listened to the loud buzzing of insects not deciding if they complained to the heat or in good cheer, applauded it wildly Bob Whites were busily introducing themselves While finches arranged the cartouches of bushes in the coolness of shadows, deep in the fencerow It was summer and she lay glistening and golden in her namesake reading in the sea-foam of clouds, a tale of Aphrodite While I, with a succession of fingers, traced my name in the fine down and gooseflesh I found at the tops of her thighs and the swelling above them Silently daring her to guess what I had written she uttered a name, I deemed a guess, close enough as she pulled me above her, rising to meet me It was summer and the grass was strained to keep Earth below us even as the sky struggled to add weight to the day Caught as we were, between May and October caught as we were, between Heaven and hell caught as we were, between Uranus and Gaea It was that summer Aphrodite recited the tales to Anchises she read in the flattened grass of our meadow |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...Superb imagery and feeling...the beauty, tinged with tears...perhaps of the future of there time together? |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
 ...good grief... WOW |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
in awe |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
(Note the time on this reply wranx) I couldn't sleep. So I was just tossing and turning over there, and I got to thinking about this poem, which I'd read earlier. I was thinking about how remarkably you transfer tone through your writings to the reader, especially these lovely "afterglow" memories that you craft so artfully. And, as is my habit (as you know) one thought led to the other (which is why I have so much trouble sleeping) and I got to thinking about my "technique" of what I've previously termed "method writing". And then I got to wondering if perhaps you, too, use a special technique...?  I mean, these "afterglow" moments are so incredibly real for me, that I thought perhaps??? heh. yeah, I know. sheesh. There's just some questions little sisters shouldn't ask big brothers, huh? *giggle* *snort* *choke* (wranx is gonna kill me for this, good poets--but he has to catch me first!) *ahem* Let's just say it was good for me too.  (came back to edit for netiquette--four o clock in the morning and they want POLITE) sheesh again |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
OH MY GOD! Ed.. I am totally, totally blown away by the imagery, the feel of this...I swear I was there. I applaud you Bro. Magnificent.. and it's mine. Maree  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
*smiling* |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
"It was summer and she lay glistening and golden in her namesake" This is a beautiful poem. Amazing imagery and detail. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
*trying to catch my breath* ......Damn!! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Quail -- In a word, G O R G E O U S ! ! ! |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Beautiful and so descriptive. A wonderful read Ed. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
And when her voice wavered, it's clear she had someone to spell her. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
...damn |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
nodshaking head Gusaytch |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
wow...damn..holy...wow... I'm in awe of you. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ohhhhhh My, oh My, Oh my, Ed!!!! Whew!! |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
another gem. -majnu |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
WOW TOTALLY BLOWN AWAY |
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