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Sacrificed to Aphrodite
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Sacrificed to Aphrodite |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
I will drink of the most bitter poison Taste its strength upon my dry and cracked lips Knowing my mind has lost sense of reason Still, I would keep taking the damning sips I would place the blade of the sharpened knife Upon my breast, the point cold in its cut, Feel it drain the blood from this useless life As sight grows dim, these eyes begin to shut I could drown in depths of oceans endless To sink in its dark and watery grave Of falling to sleep in dreams bottomless, Yet another with crushed hopes to be saved I would do these things rather willingly Than suffer ever, you apart from me |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
intense...very passionate! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Such anguish should never befall a loving heart, so intense and wild is this passion. Well done. TD |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
An extremely intense ode, PK... but Sir, it looks good. Very good. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
PK -- the sacrifice -- I understand....beautiful poetry!  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I can identify with the sacrifice as well, but in reading couldn't help think, do we cause so much pain for ourselves by insisting on having what we know is not good for us...do we consentrate on the happiness of others rather then ourselves...what good would come from having something that isn't right...it would be wrong...and I could not help but think, we are as children acting out, when we cannot have what we want. This is what your words spoke to me...a great lesson is freeing us of much pain, we so many times cause ourselves. Good one...very intense and deep. I loved this. Thank you for sharing. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very profound write...but SO well expressed. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
Wow...came back to the site after my work is thru and saw ya'll replies. Thank you all so much. I don't have anything else new. I might dip into my archives next, just to keep my name alive. |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
Wow. Passionate. Bold. Beautifully woven. |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
Thank you Echo....you're my fellow Coleridge fan right? |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
I am in awe of your talent. Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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