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Ratleader

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0 posted 2004-05-17 09:06 AM

Shooting Daisies

I shot daisies today.

Random I mean, not trying
for petals or anything;
the barrel’s washed out,
it won’t hold that tight
a pattern at a hundred feet.
It’s all Loves-Me-Not anyway
when you shoot the petals off.
I just aimed for their heads,
knocked them to yellow chaos
there in the back yard.

I cut the one I missed.
It looks pretty in a bud vase.

Sunshine

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1 posted 2004-05-17 09:19 AM

The one in the bud vase?
Her name is Hope.

inkedgoddess
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2 posted 2004-05-17 09:25 AM

I cut the one I missed.
It looks pretty in a bud vase.

ouch!!
prettier in its own house tho, i'd venture to say,
if i were the daisy would i opt for annihilation or castration of soul to sit in a vase....hmmm
got me to think

Ratleader

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3 posted 2004-05-17 09:26 AM

Actually there was only one I did shoot.
Felt so bad about it that in three shots
I couldn't make myself hit the second.

That's the one I picked.

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Enchantress
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4 posted 2004-05-17 09:29 AM

Since daisies are my favourite flower
I'm pleased you came back in
to tell us what actually happened.
Excellent write Ed.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

icebox
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5 posted 2004-05-17 09:33 AM

The real trick is to cut the stem with the shot, just where you would pick it.

Then you gather them up and put them all in a vase.

suthern

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6 posted 2004-05-17 09:45 AM

I like Sunshine's response. *S* I also like yours... in a world where false macho seems the norm and inflicting pain is too often the response to feeling it, I admire and respect the man unable to take that second shot... and willing to say so. *S*

As is often the case with your work, I read this on many levels... and as always with your work, it's superb whatever depth the reader chooses to acknowledge. *S*

passing shadows
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7 posted 2004-05-17 12:53 PM

love your perspective

LeeJ
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8 posted 2004-05-17 01:08 PM

there are men, and then there are real men who are not afraid to stand by their convictions and don't buckle under due to insecurities or need.

Very brilliant write.

Martie

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9 posted 2004-05-17 01:16 PM

Ed

This poem makes me feel so sad.

PS...the thing is...you probably shot hundreds of daisy seeds out into the yard to grow.

muted

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10 posted 2004-05-17 01:18 PM

fantastic unique write..far out, im keeping this

Edder
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11 posted 2004-05-17 01:29 PM

well done, brother Ed

Pilgrimage
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12 posted 2004-05-17 05:04 PM

This is a fantastic poem. Just fantastic.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Corinne
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13 posted 2004-05-17 05:21 PM

This is hilarous. Thanks for the Monday smile.

Corinne

Dark Angel
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14 posted 2004-05-17 05:33 PM

awww, love the ending....you're such a gentle man hehe

C'mere Mr Rat

I'm keeping this one too.

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

Sadelite
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15 posted 2004-05-17 11:38 PM

Hm.  You shot the daisy, but left one.  From one you'll reap seeds to plant again.   Hey there,  have you any plans to blow away the pesty Dandelions?  (They used to drive me crazy with the first few hundred Love Me, Love Me NOts!  I've blown away a few myself!)
   Good to read your thoughts again.
           Sadie

iliana
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16 posted 2004-05-18 12:48 PM

Hmmmmmmmm.....better shotting daisies than pushing up daisies....lol
No, really, great poem and I especially though icebox's comments were right on!

TexUS
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17 posted 2004-08-07 11:20 PM

Enjoyed this one so very much- Thanks for the

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