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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2004-05-17 04:39 AM

I will not grieve
for a lost lullaby,
or a hopeless caress..

you have fed upon me,
and still want more..
Am I not but bones?

My soul
now undressed,
I now lay side by side
to die
with tortured
butterflies..

Pinned and useless.

You
were to be my savior,
but you
have lied..
pricked my stars
with needles.

I do not need you tonight,
you take pleasure in shattering my bones..

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

1 posted 2004-05-17 04:44 AM

straight down the line..totally awesome.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-05-17 10:06 AM

good one lady!

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

3 posted 2004-05-17 03:43 PM

You
were to be my savior,
but you
have lied..
pricked my stars
with needles.

when even the stars are missing their vocal chords, u know this one has hurt for a long time to come......
got me in tears..

mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

4 posted 2004-05-17 06:01 PM

so achingly beautiful....as usual, you truly feel like a poet

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2004-05-17 06:04 PM

sometimes, I don't know how to respond to your words...

I just want you to know I always read you...

(and I know you will make a wonderful Mom...)

M

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

6 posted 2004-05-17 08:54 PM

Kaoru,
I liked this very much.
Sadie

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2004-05-17 10:09 PM

Hauntingly beautiful...love your style.
Bless you and your little one Meg.
Heart Hugs.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

8 posted 2004-05-17 10:45 PM

I hate to say it but I loved the comparision to butterflies, awesome Megan, just loved this one. I too read you all the time but sometimes don't leave a thumbprint so will thank you now for your talent.

Today I'm only moving clouds, tomorrow I'll try mountains.

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

9 posted 2004-05-17 10:51 PM

umm,
WOW
(again)

pictureme
Member

since 2003-11-28

Posts 248
Ohio, USA

10 posted 2004-05-17 11:23 PM

Kaoru,
This was a painful read
from tortured butterflies to
pricked stars
very emotional ending with
shattered bones.
pictureme :-)

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2004-05-18 04:08 AM

sigh

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

12 posted 2004-05-20 08:05 PM

The things that make us feel whole almost make us feel too full. like we're being used.

you amaze me.

GlisteningRain
Member

since 2004-05-06

Posts 103
The clouds

13 posted 2004-05-21 12:13 PM

Like a Gem

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

14 posted 2004-05-23 02:54 AM

The analogy was truly outstanding, Kaoru!

....jo

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

15 posted 2004-05-24 08:43 PM

i truly love this so much
wish it were mine.....

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

16 posted 2004-05-24 08:51 PM

This is beauty, and this aches.

Damned fine poem

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

17 posted 2004-05-28 01:44 PM

argh, it still makes me wince. you make every reader know pain. brilliant meg.

My soul
now undressed,
I now lay side by side
to die
with tortured
butterflies..

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

18 posted 2004-05-28 02:48 PM

You have such an excellent way with words Meg. Your imagery makes one almost feel what your heart must be feeling. Awesome. Chris

Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
Hans Christian Anderson

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

19 posted 2004-05-28 02:54 PM

You write of everything and anything so dang well...

I literally brace myself when clickin' on your titles...I just know I am about to get socked in the gut..

Amazing Meg.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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