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ryun33
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0 posted 2004-05-16 09:22 AM


My Conscience humbles
under the ruble
of broken pasts
and shattered dreams

Now awaken for a second
to recollect what I’ve seen
neglecting the now present
cause my heart,
was ripped from it's seems..

Beaten till it could not see
mistreated still didn’t bleed,
on his knees he couldn’t speak...
he could'nt need...anything...

He could only realize
that everything happened
and couldn’t have happened
any different

He could only realize
that everyone is different

that was the way it was
and had to happen

No more starting from the backend
we'll start from the roots
and grow like the mighty tree
discovering the essence
of what it is to be free

I just sigh and let it be
I lost my guide trying to flee
why won't life just let me be!

But I already know the answer
my life isn’t over till I see...

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2004-05-16 09:27 AM


ryun33
Good thoughts enjoyed the read.

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2 posted 2004-05-16 10:10 AM


enjoyed
very emotional

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3 posted 2004-05-16 10:20 AM


Very Nice, Welcome to Passions....


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ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2004-05-16 10:26 AM


I liked the honesty of this write. The heart is resilient by design remember...that was the plan all along.
TD

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5 posted 2004-05-16 01:42 PM


nice write...I relate to this

Welcome to Passions

ryun33
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6 posted 2004-05-16 08:03 PM


Thank you all for the welcome
ThisDiamond
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7 posted 2004-05-17 05:36 PM


Sending you back where you belong...
Good write.
TD

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8 posted 2004-05-17 10:50 PM


I really, really liked your first verse especially!  I can't think of a better way to say it.
              Sadie

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