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Esquire Cover Up
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Esquire Cover Up |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Folk/Rock genre...... I fear this character comes across as too much of a loser but hell, I had a ball writing this anyway...... Now the week has passed work's done at last Billy's gonna have some fun He knows a spot where the music rocks and the girls are two to one Strolls in there like he has no cares actin like He's twenty-one using words for amazin the ladies waitin for a partying son of a gun Chorus: Hey, it's Friday night at old Sweetwaters Billy's gonna dance with sympathy's daughter fill up with whiskey to escape his mind laugh and sing till closing time Try to convince young Mary or Jane He's the Don Quixote for love starved pain With just for men hair and Gucci shoes He's an esquire cover up for feelin blue. But Billy's out in the hall after last call the lights turned up hurting his eyes Remembering her and the things they'd do roll in and out of his mind Once in a while he gets smiles from young girls passin by But the truth be known he's so alone Inside he's ready to cry ch#2 Hey, it's Friday night at old Sweetwaters Billy's been dancing with sympathy's daughter He drank lots a whiskey to escape his mind but he's by himself at closing time There ain't no Mary ain't no Jane Just him thinkin bout her again With just for men hair and Gucci shoes He's an esquire cover up for feelin blue bridge They used to order pizza n have a late night laugh cause they couldn't make love feelin so fat but when morning came they'd shower together skin to skin there was nothing better now he's payin the price in this little town where there ain't no cure for foolin around... ch#2 rep Hey, it's Friday night at the old Sweetwaters Billy's benn dancing with sympathy's daughter He drank lots a whiskey to escape his mind but he's by himself at closing time There ain't no Mary ain't no Jane Just him thinkin bout her again With just for men hair and Gucci shoes He's an esquire cover up for feelin blue............fade [This message has been edited by ethome (05-16-2004 06:04 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
 encore, encore!  ....jo |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
makes me remember the good ole days of bar hoppin  havin fun, missing one.  loved this. glad i stopped by. now i wish i had a shot or a cold beer |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Enjoyed this very much, Ethome... there's been some days where I felt I could very well play sympathy's daughter...  you may want to catch Fagin's write [it's somewhere over on Page 2, if you are set to 200] because I think you'll enjoy him...I know he's been reading yours...he's newly registered, so it will take him awhile to get use to his new surroundings... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I like this one. The rhythm was well-defined and I felt like I was singing along. I really like the 'sympathy's daughter' too. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Cool! JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric "I had a ball writing this anyway......" and I had a ball reading it! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Just who is sympathy's daughter? Love the country in this. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love it...love it...love it! Sing it again Eric! Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sometimes we just gotta kick back and have a ball! good song here Eric |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Just for men hair...Priceless TD |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I agree with TD, just for men hair -- love it. Smiles -- Susan |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Late last night at Sweetwaters We were hungry for a snack, We planned an all nighter We sat way in the back We all ordered something to drink Some whiskey mixed with cokes And gabbed about all kinds of things And told some dirty jokes We didn't cause no trouble Till suddenly this man Leaped up from his barstool seat And pointed with his hand Said to us with burning eyes His voice was like a hiss: "The sky is falling, the world will end! And then right after this He turned to run But hadn't seen By the door, the gum machine He knocked it over, with a crash And left Sweetwaters in a dash Gum balls were spilled Went off the curb, NO one seemed to care, No one even spoke a word, "What the hell's eating him?" We wondered in the lull This is not a true tale but, Who needs the truth if it's dull? Loved your write ethome....can I hear ya play it sometime on your new Larrivee? |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
This is great stuff! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ DELIGHTFUL .... just DELIGHTFUL~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ethome -- came back for a second chuckle. Also, wanted to post a LOL to TOERAG if he's watching! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much to everyone who commented on this piece.......I surely do appreciate it very much. I was away for a while and was very suprised when I returned to read all of these wonderful warm friendly comments........You all are truly such good friends... Eric |
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