Open Poetry #32 |
To Do RIGHT |
MERCURY Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 190Ireland |
Lies doth drip off your honey-suckle lips, Your beauty has sunk your fair share of ships. Magnetic eyes enticing my soul, Always getting out of bother using a legal loophole. Your swaying body dancing with the wind, For you I have indeed sinned. Beautiful temptress of the south, Why can’t I believe anything from your sultry mouth? I know I class you as my muse, However my heart will not take another bruise. Please disperse from rose-tinted sight, For my head tells me to do right. |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
"...your swaying body dancing in the wind..." I read your poem and by the time I reached this line, I was already swaying to the rythm of your writting. I enjoyed this. quatro |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
ditto, enjoyed this one to...sometimes to do as you said, is very very wise. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I really enjoyed this piece.. Lovely, melancholy, yet very lyrical. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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swatcatpettus Member
since 2004-04-12
Posts 57CA |
sweet.... |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Ah, yes. And my head has told me to do right, too! Sometimes it seems like a loss! But then again, I suppose not! This is a great one to think about... Much enjoyed! Sadie |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
You really did this right! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice...very nice |
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