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Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2004-05-09 01:23 PM

We sing our somber songs down through the times,
on strings of lute and siren’s tunes, we plead
to lay aside their swords and serpents’ crimes.

On golden wings, we speak in prose and rhymes,
of thrusts of blades and war’s amoral deeds.
We sing our somber songs down through the times.

We withhold our love, through lives and lifetimes
to sway men’s thoughts, persuade them of the need
to lay aside their swords and serpents’ crimes.

We warn of omens, warbling dismal signs.
From dark and frigid beds we freely bleed.
We sing our somber songs down through the times.

We beg to bring them home within war times;
we call them to turn aside from green greed;
to lay aside their swords and serpents’ crimes.

We mourn alone through many Christmastimes;
grinding grain to ferment nectarous mead.
We sing our somber songs down through the times,
to lay aside their swords and serpents’ crimes.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2004-05-09 02:09 PM

Kudos to you, excellent job. I guess peace will only come when we learn to hold our enemy close to our chest like a brother or sister.

I am keeping this keeper!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2004-05-09 02:30 PM

Gads...I need to find some Kleenex...there have been so many beautiful poems and stories today...and this, Corinne, is going into my bible...

there will always be rain songs...just as I pray there will always be life.

And thank you for sharing part of your day with me...give your son a hug for me, please.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2004-05-09 02:36 PM

Corinne
I find Villanelles hard to write, good job.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2004-05-09 03:53 PM

Corinne -- I have tried this form before with not too much success. You did it honor!

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

5 posted 2004-05-09 04:26 PM

I wish I could write a Villanelle... I wish I could write like you.

I'm keeping this beauty too.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

6 posted 2004-05-09 04:54 PM

So well done and a wonderful read!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-05-09 05:03 PM

gah...this is so beautiful...so beautiful

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

8 posted 2004-05-10 09:37 AM

Thank you Mysteria!

Hi Karilea, -- this is a beast of a form, the Villanelle. They should have named it "Villianelle." Heh. Not sure if I got the meter right, I have no ear for it! My anti-war poem (it was a response poem to another poem).

Hope you had a wonderful Mother's Day!

Sey - they sure as heck are hard to write! Thank you!

Thanks Iliana!

Aww, Maree, you are sweet, thank you! Just keep writing and reading!

Thanks Honeybunch and PassingShadows!

Corinne

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2004-05-10 09:47 AM

Hey...that IS how I spell it! I've tried...they're a wicked form, they are...

and I've been meaning to ask...how's the book coming?

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