ethereal eyes (edited from original post in teen forum)

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Open Poetry #32

ethereal eyes (edited from original post in teen forum)

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-05-08 09:07 PM

hey i used to post in the teen forum, but i wanted more comments so i have moved here. i have edited this one slightly and i hope you guys enjoy it.

ethereal eyes

I looked for your eyes so brown in contrast to colorful concern
But the red roots of sadness surround the fertile beauty.
Have you watered your beautiful optical garden lately?
Do you drink the stream near the lovely tilled earth?
not so soon, my dear;
not so long,it is near.

Young birds retrodict the beginning of spring,
Spring bounds into your eyes as children at play.
Have you disillusioned the past to yourself and all around??
Is that smile forced like water our of a dam?
not so soon, my dear;
not so long, it is near.

Contradict the understood you in my statements
and point my flattery to another not present.
Do you accept these gifts of gold, frankinsence, and myrrh?
Do you love the essence inside my bottled heart?
not so soon, my dear;
not so long, it is near.

Soon the parted paths shall unite under one heading,
Together we melt at meeting the lights in our eyes.
Do your eyes still shimmer(only in memory)?
Do you still compete with the stars?
not so soon, my dear;
not so long, it is near.

I search among the wells of intensity that draw me to drink deep,
Your spiritful eyes that never deny my reflection.
Come home to this game of anything you want,
Come home to me, I will become the gardener in your eyes.
so soon, my dear;
so quiet, we are near.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

1 posted 2004-05-08 09:25 PM

I search among the wells of intensity that draw me to drink deep,
Your spiritful eyes that never deny my reflection.

Very Nice.

Susan

GlisteningRain
Member

since 2004-05-06

Posts 103
The clouds

2 posted 2004-05-09 01:57 AM

I love the aliteration and the title reminds me of something I once wrote.

B

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2004-05-09 11:00 AM

thank you very much, i wasn't sure how the new additions would sound.

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

4 posted 2005-05-13 02:58 AM

This was beautiful~

Lovely...I just might be biased...for I have brown eyes...LOL!

~ARH

<i><b>"Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take - but by the moments that take our breath away." </b>

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